[Report This]Date: March 24 2022 2:41 AM Title: Chapter 2: The Murder of James Grundy
Really fantastic story line. I'm glad you fixed the text issue, and sorry I was not able to respond in time to advise you of the text issues I have had here.
First, I use a version of Microsoft Word to write my stories, then link them in when downloading a story. It takes some trial and error to get used to paragraph spacing and other discrepancies between Microsoft Word and the text app used at this site.
I think your issue, which obviously you fixed, was copying a hard copy (think of it as an image rather than text document) that could not be edited.
Second, your story, absolutely great. Not many writers have an interesting story that just so happens to included size change. Yours does which makes it so much more entertaining.
Anyone can write "She shrunk him down and stuffed him in her shoe", as hot an idea as that is; but you have an actual story that happens to involve tinies. Much more rewarding for the reader.
I can not wait to read more of your story. Though I do have one question, what ever happened to Potter who Cindy stuffed in her butt crack?
Author's Response:
It seems that formatting text on this website has become harder than I'm used to. I've been having to do a lot of trial and error, but I think I got the hang of it now. Thanks for the tips though.
And thank you, I did try to make the story more important than anything else, so it feels great that you appreciate that. I must admit that Potter never reappears in this story, so one can assume that he was arrested along with the Gryphon.
[Report This]Date: March 23 2022 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 2: The Murder of James Grundy
Whoa! Bob, this is your story? Long time no see! When I did my first review, I completely didn’t pay attention to who wrote and assumed it was just a new story from a new writer, but now that I see it’s you, I have a good feeling about this story.
Your other stories always interested me and while I wanted more from that universe, I’m just glad you are back to writing again. Im guessing this is a new fresh idea you have.
Actually, I remember you wrote about officer Rebecca in a similar way to Cindy, but that’s a good thing because I like that kind of character.
I think this chapter’s cliffhanger is the most exciting part so far. Who is the lucky person to be her partner. I think it might be fun to have some innocent young guy as an intern be her partner. She would already have power over him by experience and her flirty confidence could really shine there.
Either way, I’m sure whoever you pick will work great with Cindy.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey man, I always appreciate you reviewing my stuff and giving me feedback, people like you keep me writing. Yes, one of the things I wished I explored more of in the last story was the legal and criminal aspect, especially cause a giantess cop is...just so damn hot. I gotta say I put in a lot more work in Cindy than Rebecca, so I hope you'll enjoy her story.