Date: January 12 2024 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 12: The Assassination of Cindy Mitchells
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
thank you!
[Report This]Date: April 05 2022 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 12: The Assassination of Cindy Mitchells
Now we see the side of Cindy that scares people. For most of the story, it was just rumors and that incident with that other officer she was previously partnered with.
But now we get a true tale of what happens when someone gets on Cindy’s bad side.
I like how Cindy takes the high road and says she doesn’t want to kill him, but toys with him instead. And to be fair, he’s not a threat anymore. He’s now reduced to her toy and she’s completely fine with that. I’m sure she will likely play with him to get more information to find the Satyr guy later on.
After reading this chapter, part of me wants Thomas to get on her bad side. Not something too drastic, but enough to make Cindy toy with him to teach him a lesson lol.
Also, if this is what Cindy does to assassins, send me her location and I will gladly make a visit. Haha!
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
No matter how scary or unethical Cindy is, she will always have that moral compass of not killing people. I wonder if this makes her more or less sexy. I feel like Thomas is one of the few people that don't get on Cindy's nerves, and he's always trying very hard to not piss her off. Maybe he will one day make her angry enough for some punishment. Haha, yes I'd also want to be her assassin, only to willingly walk into the trap. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 05 2022 2:12 AM Title: Chapter 12: The Assassination of Cindy Mitchells
In chapter 10, after Officers Mitchells and Phealan watched the video, Thomas says “The woman, Aphrodite. That was Megan Harriet. It pretty much confirms what the Satyr said.” Shouldn’t that be “…confirms what the Gryphon said.”?
In chapter 11, the admitting of Thomas in his diary came out in very small print size; I think you may want to reload those final lines so they are in normal font size rather than appearing as part of the “Chapter End Notes”.
You also have bleed ins between statements. One person says one thing but their statements are continued in the same paragraph of the next person talking. It's a bit confusing, yet still understandable.
Those are my complaints. Now to my praise.
Aphrodite crushing one guy in her cleavage and dropping Desmond Jackson in the front of her panty is hot as hell. One can only dream of Megan Harriet / Aphrodite dropping them inside of her panty.
The dream sequence of Thomas being crushed between Officer Cindy Mitchells' breasts was fantastic, and shows Thomas slowing succumbing to the sexual powers of Cindy. How far will this go, especially since Cindy ridiculed Thomas by asking if he wanted to sit on her lap.
Cindy disrobing and disarming Shadow Stalker is great, especially her casual disposal of him between her butt cheeks to deal with later. It would be nice if she decides to deal with him much later and simply stuffs him up her asshole; but one can only dream.
Again, great story!
Author's Response:
In Chapter 10, Thomas says it confirms what Satyr said, referring to the fact that Satyr admitted to the murders. The fact that he is with Megan Harriet confirms that this is all a connected scheme.
I tried to fix the last part of chapter 11, and I can't seem to figure it out. Oh well, it's not the biggest deal, but I'll give it another try.
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed these different aspects of the plot. Look forward to more!