[Report This]Date: July 03 2022 2:13 AM Title: Part 2
Great story and great concept.
My only suggestion, is that you create a 3-D version of Matt in the real world that mimics the now computerized Matt. Perhaps the red laser, from chapter 1, that scanned Matt can create a 3-D version of him in the real world; and transfer information (i.e. Matt's actions, his thoughts, Kirsten's actual foot odor, sensations of Matt's tiny body to her real body, etc.) so Kirsten and Matt can experience an actual interaction between them.
The computer program would act as a simple medium between them. However between Matt experiencing Kirsten's program of herself and Kirsten experiencing a 3-D version of her computerized version of Matt; they would both be experiencing a real life version of each other.
Just a suggestion.
Great story regardless. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
the goal with having a sci-fi machine was to do things i cant do in other stories like forcibly muting the shrunken guy or setting the temperatures to unrealistically high degrees (next chapter).
i understand what you're suggesting but to me or at least how i picture things, there's not much of a difference. (like a giant could stick a tiny in their butt, or a giant could stick a voodoo doll in their butt which corresponds with the AI sticking a tiny in their butt, or the AI can just independently stick the tiny in their butt. to me thats all the same). but regardless if those kind of interactions are more your thing then the fourth chapter is pretty similar to that anyways :)