Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2022 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 1: Where am I?

Very nice start so far.

You asked for feedback, whether positive or negative, so I shall give you some advice someone once gave me when I first posted here.

I wrote a story I thought was really good, but no one responded.  I wondered what was so terrible with my story when a lady wrote back that there was nothing wrong with my story.  People, and even those that love your story may not leave feedback, positive or otherwise.

She told me the best thing to do is simply write my story, the way I want my story to go, and my audience will find itself.  That is the advice I'd like to pass on to you.

Sure, a commenter might make a suggestion you may or may not have thought of, yet adds immensely to your story.  That is the type of suggestion you should consider so long as it does not take away from your overall concept.

Another suggestion, USE SPELLCHECK!!!  Nothing takes away from a story more than bad grammar.

My final suggestion, wait a day after writing a chapter before you post it.  Then go back and proofread it.  Make sure it says what you want it to say.  People often rush to post, then you have a sentence along the lines of "She shrank the man, then he put her in his panty" {Wait, did a woman shrink a guy or did a guy shrink a woman?  WTF???}.

So far your writing is top notch.  Well done, but where's the shrinking?  HE HE HE

Author's Response:

Oh my god! Thank you so much for the advice! It really means a ton that you would even read my story and enjoy it, let alone respond. I'm not too worried about wanting everyone to, but that seems smart. I'll write my story, and those who like it will like it I guess. And the shrinking is coming soon, I promise!

Reviewer: SizeChangeLina Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2022 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 1: Where am I?

Promising start. Cant wait for more !!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and letting me know you like it! It actually means so much to me