Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18 2023 8:39 PM Title: A Night With My Giant Girlfriend

These little blurbs between Jazmin and Claire the last few chapters have been pretty enlightening.

It was intriguing to see Jazmin try to convince Claire to shrink down voluntarily. Between her words and the way she delivers them, I think this is the most honest we've seen Jazmin in the story so far. Again, it comes back to her lonely nature. Yeah, Claire's right that Jazmin now definitely wants her as a tiny pet now, regardless of if she can be trusted, but this exchange between them shows that Jazmin wants her to WANT that as well.

Deep down, probably subconsciously, she wants Claire to choose her, in a way, to want to be around her despite everything that's happened between them in the last few chapters. I think that same yearning shines through when Jazmin is excited that Claire offers, unprovoked, to hang out with her that night. Maybe I'm misreading and Jazmin is really just happy to get some extra sleep, but I really think her reaction has more to do with the prospect of Claire choosing to be her friend even after seeing her true nature.

Of course, as Claire seems to have figured out, this probably won't save her from being shrunk if she doesn't do something quick. Her plan with the camera is a good one, and it'll probably work, provided Jazmin doesn't decide to tear Micropolis apart looking for Justin that night.

And yeah, I figured it would be just Justin's luck that Jazmin would make sure to handle the restocking that night. I'm curious to see how long it takes her to figure out what happened, whether she correctly figures out why Brooke took him, and what happens to the city along the way.

And, of course, I'm still impressed by how Claire is able to maintain her composure despite understanding exactly how much danger she's in here. Her internal reactions show how frightened she is at the prospect of becoming Jazmin's toy, which makes her being able to maintain her natural attitude toward Jazmin outwardly that much more admirable. I know I keep saying this, but I feel like it keeps being worthy of a mention each time we see her with Jazmin.

As for Brooke and Justin, their "interaction" in this chapter was everything it needed to be, both from a descriptive standpoint and from a character-oriented one.

I love the irony of Justin making Brooke feel a lust and sexual pleasure that no one else can based almost entirely on the fact that he can't actually make her feel much of anything in a physical sense. Beyond Justin's helplessness doing it for her, it seems as though Brooke is turned on by the fact that Justin, despite being too small to pleasure her physically, is giving it his all just to try and make her feel something. Again, going back to that comparison between Brooke and Jazmin, where the latter would be disappointed by this, Brooke loves the effort he's putting in precisely because of its futility, as well as the fact that Justin is eager to try despite said futility.

Also, that line about Brooke wondering about Justin's cock was a noteworthy one. Instead of being desperate for the all-mighty penis like Jazmin seems to be, this bit shows that while Brooke isn't simply disappointed that Justin's equipment is too small for her. Rather, it's Justin's penis in particular that she's wondering about, meaning her thoughts are more about wanting Justin at full size rather than being disappointed with how he is now. This is an important distinction, as Brooke simply thinking that she wanted a dick inside her during sex with Justin would imply that she's unfulfilled, which I don't think is the case here. Instead, that thought shows a logical want on her part, without making her seem less invested in the relationship, if all that babbling makes any sense.

And Justin, for his part, is written really well here, I think. While he should absolutely have a sense of fear during all of this, no matter how careful and caring Brooke is toward him, this chapter is all about him embracing his lust and newfound kink. There's just enough reference to his concern here that it's clear that he's aware of the dangers of what they're doing together, but most of his thoughts and dialog revolve around him wanting to pleasure Brooke and try things on her body at his tiny size. This also shows an incredible amount of trust in Brooke, which helps advance the relationship between the two while also letting us all indulge in some good old-fashioned smut at the same time!

And, as I mentioned last chapter, Brooke's mix of concern, lust, and teasing continue to make her one of my favorite gentle giantesses I've read. She clearly loves and respects Justin as an equal, yet gets turned on by her physical superiority to him (it's not even just dominance; just holding him in her hand was enough to get her wet in this chapter). And how she teased him at the end there by offering to carry him in her tits, pussy, or ass when he couldn't express his obvious concerns was perfect! In short, she'll do everything she can to keep him safe, but she won't just treat him like he's made of glass, either, which is nice.

And the descriptions of how Brooke's simple actions have such a profound impact on Justin are really well done! Also, I'm not sure if we'll get the chance because it looks like the plot is about to take a serious step forward here soon, but I'm hoping we get to revisit that idea about Justin wearing a camera and exploring Brooke's body again, especially if a live feed is involved.

I figured Dr. Perkins would make her way into the story officially before too long, and there are certainly some implications behind her voice seeming faint and faraway. I'm curious to see if our three protagonists get a chance to unite and piece together what's happening before one of them ends up in Jazmin's dollhouse.

Oh, and I had a quick question I've been meaning to ask: What's the revenue stream for Micro Cities Inc.? Are the residents paying rent to live there, and if so, are they making actual money through their jobs in the micro cities? And also if so, what happens if a resident doesn't make rent?

Author's Response:

I'm sorry to get back to you after such a long time!

I'm glad you're still enjoying the story and I'm glad you like the characters as much as I do! :)

I really appreciate your reviews and level of detail you put into them!

It's funny you ask about Micro Cities, Inc.'s revenue streams. I had written a few blurbs about it when brainstorming for this story. It basically comes down to three points:
1. As you guessed, rent payments from residents.

2. Government subsidies for 'low cost' housing. This gets paid out based on the number of units that are occupied every month.

3. Government grants for 'high density' housing. Basically a one-time payment to subsidies the building of the apartments.

Points #2 and #3 were based on funding and laws from before shrinking tech was invented. Needless to say some people aren't happy about how much Micro Cities has managed to abuse these funds. #3 specifically is why Hank (Dr. Perkin's business partner) is so gun-ho about developing a 1:2000 scale city. He wants to cash in before the laws and policies catch up to them.

As far as what happens to those that don't pay rent... I wrote a few drafts of a scene that illustrated this--but ultimately scrapped it. Perhaps I'll explore this more in a spin-off story. In short: a certain unnamed character from accounting could be very convincing when it came time to collect. If all else failed Jazmin would typically handle the eviction--occasionally re-homing them to her dollhouse (if they were cute).

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2023 6:59 AM Title: First Impressions

I really like the duality between Brooke and Jazmin on display in this chapter. We see that, in a way, they've got a whole two sides of the same coin thing going on.

I started to take more interest in Jazmin as a character in the last chapter, as her threat against Claire at the end of it made me look at her behavior throughout the story in a new light and realize that the only difference Jazmin sees between the residents and regular-sized people are the methods she can use to dominate them. It seemed to me that Jazmin doesn't see Claire or Alia as equal to her anymore than she does Justin (more useful, maybe, but really they're the same to her in terms of their worth as people). That attitude was on full display in her conversation with Claire at the start of this chapter.

Jazmin doesn't care if Claire enjoys herself when they hit the bar scene and chase guys. She just wants someone there with her, and Claire just happens to be the person she's used to having with her. That's made clear when Jazmin doesn't skip a beat when Claire asks if Jazmin just expects her to hang out after being threatened with shrinking. She does, and if Claire doesn't do it, she's no longer useful and will find herself shrunk, too. Honestly, if Claire caves and hangs out with her unwillingly, it would probably make it a little more fun for Jazmin, I think.

Digging a little deeper, Jazmin's obsession with domination seems to have made her awfully lonely. Throughout the story, she's dressed sluttily, talked about the dicks of people she's slept with, and mentioned times she's kidnapped residents of Micro Cities Inc. for her own amusement (she even has her own collection at home, apparently). But she's got no real friends and certainly no lover to show for it. Going out to the bar and waking up hung over or bragging about temporary conquests covers up a sad existence, with her evil, domineering ways trying vainly to fill a void created by her false sense of superiority over everyone else.

Brooke, on the other hand, has gone from concerned about the size difference between Justin and her to optimistic to curiously lustful to fully embracing it. She confesses that she loves dominating Justin; she admits that it excites her in a way that she's never felt before. Teasing and playfully threatening him really does it for her.

At the same time, however, we see that Justin really cares for Justin and definitely views him as a person. She cares about his comfort during the drive to her place, worries that those playful threats might make Justin think that she really would do something as crazy as eating him, is saddened when she hears that Justin is terrified while in this giant world with her, and makes clear that she would never forgive herself if something happened to him under her care.

Brooke seems to get as much pleasure out of dominating Justin and Jazmin gets out of dominating everyone. However, because Brooke sees Justin as a relative equal despite his tiny size, that pleasure is much more filling for her than Jazmin's. In the case of Brooke and Justin, while she's in control, they're doing things together. When Jazmin dominates everyone else, she's doing it at their expense. That proves to be the difference between real happiness and fleeting pleasure.

Apologies for the book report there, but I just found the contrast between heroine and villain here to be really interesting.

Oh, and I also love that Brooke, who was almost embarrassed at the thought of trying to give Justin scraps off her plate at their first date back when she first found out he was tiny, ended up doing exactly that and loving it in this chapter. And in the next chapter, it seems we'll get the answer to her question of just how Justin can perform in the bedroom at that size as well.

Claire continues to be one of my favorite characters in this story. I love how defiant she was against Jazmin even after the threat in the last chapter. Then, with Brooke around, she even made a joke at Jazmin's expense. Really, the fact that she could seem so casual during that conversation with Brooke after Jazmin reaffirmed her threat just beforehand is pretty impressive. I also like how Claire takes up for the residents, both one confronting Jazmin and when encouraging Brooke to go into the city barefoot so as not to intimidate them.

Now, if only there was someone with a recently invented communications device that could answer her question about the new instant-shrinking method. Hmmm.

And seeing Justin discover that he enjoys the Brooke's actual power over him as much as he does her teasing about it during their nightly talks was a lot of fun as well. The combination of trust, fear, and lust can be a powerful thing.

I look forward to the next chapter, as this one built up the coming smut quite well. Also, I love body exploration, so seeing that mentioned was great as well. But I also suspect that we'll see some plot movement as well, as some elements seem to be coming together.

Also, I wonder who's stocking Micropolis during the night that Justin is staying at Brooke's.

Author's Response:

Thank you! I really appreciate these thorough write-ups. It's a good feeling to have someone care about the story this much!

I actually hadn't considered why Jazmin acts the way she does, but I think you're right. In my notes I wrote that she was an only child and 'always got what she wanted'. I agree, she's definitely lonely.

I'm amazed at your attention to detail!

Thanks again for this amazing, well-written feedback!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2023 7:19 AM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

I just caught up with this story, and I wanted to say how much I've enjoyed it so far. Also, a heads up, this is going to be long (I like to overthink stuff).

I really like the pacing and casualness of the worldbuilding so far. I mean, we learn the basic details of the various tiny cities and the shrinking technology through a fun and flirty conversation between Justin and Natasha at the start, more about the company and Dr. Perkins through Jazmin's rudeness and her co-workers reaction to it early on, and, most recently, that there are classes that have to be taken in order to handle a resident that's below a certain size (or is that class needed to handle residents of all sizes?) through Brooke's flirty teasing.

These are all valuable plot points (at least, I'm assuming Dr. Perkins will become relevant later on), but they're spread throughout the story in a way that flows naturally with the conversations in which they're revealed and spread out in a way that doesn't overwhelm the reader with too much information too soon. I think the hardest part of worldbuilding is the urge to infodump everything at the start to get it out of the way, but you avoided that intimidating clunckiness masterfully.

The characters are all also really engaging and easy to invest in. Man, when Justin had that "all is lost" chapter, where he found out about his size difference with Brooke and realized he was trapped tiny back-to-back, I really felt for him. He's been a pretty likable main character so far, and the personality he's displayed, whether he's lightheartedly teasing Natasha about her height in chapter 1 or navigating being tinier than the other residents in the shrinking room, really gives him a voice, so to speak. It's easy for characters, especially main characters, to fall into generic troupes and dialog, but, again, you avoid that quite well.

The harem style love life Justin has embraced so far has worked especially well in this story, as it allows the reader to enjoy sex scenarios on different size scales a bit, taking advantage of the size variations offered by the cities. Also, all three of the women in Justin's life bring something different to the table.

Natasha has an infectious personality and fun loving attitude that really draws the reader to her from the start, and Ally seems a more laid back, down to earth person looking for a bit of fun. Looking through some of the other reviews, I can see why so many people want Justin to end up with one of them.

But, personally, I prefer the slow burn, and, if this last chapter is any indication, that long game is about to pay off with Brooke. Granted, a lot of the chemistry between them happens "off stage" early on, as we're told that they're vibing without seeing it like we do with the other two girls (I don't think this is a bad thing, as the story would have been bogged down with mundane conversation, but it did give the other two girls an "advantage" with the reader early on, I think).

But then, after the size difference is discovered, that tension makes the relationship more interesting, as does Brooke's struggle with how tiny Justin is. This makes it all the more rewarding when she decides that her feelings for him are strong enough to overcome that doubt, and the anticipation built through the interactions between them from that point on are golden, at least to me. I don't know, there's something about how Brooke can tease Justin with something that's his size by stuffing it in her tits are panties and look him in the eye as though they're the same size at the same time that I really enjoy. But it's that build, that slow burn between them that sets up those scenes and gives them a different, more intense feel.

That slow burn also comes in the form of her concerns regarding Justin's size. At first, she seems deterred and doubtful that anything can happen between them because of it, but that's built into excitement over the prospect of sex with him, which will make that likely coming sex scene between them all the more rewarding. Also, the concern she shows for Justin's safety from what could easily be dismissed as a minor inconvenience in the internet outages during Jazmin's restocking nights, shows that her newfound lust hasn't overtaken her nature as a caring girlfriend and that she's really invested in the relationship.

'm really looking forward to where things go in the next chapter, from a plot standpoint as well as a smut one, as I think we're nearing the time that Brooke finds out the truth about Justin's situation.

Finally, we have Claire and Jazmin as two regularly seen characters. I really like what you've done with Claire. There's a bit of airheadedness to her, but it doesn't define her, another trap you've managed to avoid. She's not only good-natured but brave, has good instincts and able to navigate most of Jazmin's shit as well. And honestly, I'm willing to bet that her moments of being airheaded in Micropolis probably don't happen as often in the other cities and that they would happen less frequently there if the residents had a way to communicate with her, as she really seems to care about the residents and would be quick to fix any issues (such as accidently trapping a group of them in the park with her feet or using a thimble to deliver a drink to someone too small to use it) if she only knew about it. Also, I'm eager to see what her next move is after Jazmin's threat.

And that threat really heightened my opinion of Jazmin as a villain. I thought she was a solid giantess story villain with some personality but kind of typical in the sense that she just seemed to view the residents as less than people because of their size. But after threatening to shrink and kidnap Claire, her best friend as far as we know to this point, the imply that she likes having her as a friend (as though they're still friends after that), It now seems clear to me that she just thinks of everyone as lesser than her and that the only real difference between the residents and regular sized people in her eyes is what she can get away with. This also made me reevaluate some of her earlier interactions with her co-workers in which I initially thought she was being crude because she just didn't care, but now I think this was intentional on her part in order to enjoy their shocked, angered, and embarrassed reactions, as well as the fact that they couldn't do anything about it. Maybe I'm overthinking things, but this added a bit more depth to the character for me.

Well, if you're still reading after all of that, I do have a bit of constructive criticism for you. I kind of feel like the post-rape interaction between Justin and Natasha could have been handled a bit better. Natasha being remorseful after drunkenly taking advantage of Justin was done pretty well, but I think Justin not even really addressing it was a bit of an issue. This didn't even have to be him confronting her about it; maybe he has an internal struggle in which his anger/shame/insecurity/whatever he's feeling is met with his need to comfort his close friend. Maybe seeing her cry had an effect on him, maybe his guilt over her being a resident at all overrides any negative feelings he has about the rape, or maybe there's another reason he's able to move past it.

My (admittedly long-winded) point is that Justin doesn't deal with it at all. Also, he doesn't feel inadequate when he's forced into being a sex toy by his former co-worker whom he used to tower over, yet he's dejected that he couldn't use a soap dispenser? I don't know, I just feel as though there needed to be something like that there.

But, to be fair, this story has a good bit of smut in it, and I understand that there are times in which that smut is going to skirt these issues but not deal with them for the sake of the reader enjoying said smut. I honestly wouldn't have even brought the point up, but the detail and character development throughout the story are so good that an omission like this is noticeable, and I thought maybe this feedback might help in the future if you do a similar scene in a different story.

But yeah, overall, this story is great, and I'm really enjoying it so far.

Author's Response:

I really appreciate you taking the time to write this up!

First, I want to say I'm happy you're enjoying the story so far. I put a lot of effort into weaving the characters, story, world-building, and smut together and reading this review makes that effort feel validated. Comments like this is what keeps me actively invested in my writing.

In regards to your criticisms--I wholeheartedly agree. I didn't focus on Brooke's and Justin's relationship early on as I didn't want to bog down the pacing of the story. However, I think this was a mistake in hindsight. If I had given the story a little more room to breathe, I'm confident I could've found a way to make it interesting.

As far as the interactions with Natasha--you hit the nail on the head. I was so focused on the following two scenes that I completely failed to consider how Justin would've felt at that point. Truly, this was a missed opportunity that would've added more depth to his character. This is the kind of feedback that helps me get better as a writer!

Thank you again for your in-depth and thoughtful feedback!

Reviewer: deSol Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2023 7:54 AM Title: A Wild Weekend

Amazing!  I love this world created. Great worldbuilding and story. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: ThaPhoenix Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2023 5:14 PM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

Loving this story!! The first 3 chapters with the slow shrinking you did were so amazing! REALLY nailed the process of shrinking. :3 Looking forward to more chapters!!! Thank you for writing this! 

Author's Response:

Thank you very much! I don't normally do slow shrinking stuff, so I'm happy to hear it resonated!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05 2023 7:22 PM Title: In a World of Giants

Well, I guess once this is all over, company policy could be to give shares of the company to any shrunk employees and residents, would certainly encourage people to come live in the 1:2000th city, should be a good enough sorry to the existing victims (on top of anything else) and way to prevent someone like Jazmine and her dad from coming in and doing anything. 
But lets see what happens before then, since that Is the point if the story. 
Hope its good!

Author's Response: I've got about 4 more chapters planned--stay tuned!

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2023 10:38 PM Title: Life in the Tiny City

Great chapter! So many new developments. Can’t wait to see where things go!
Wondering if there’s maybe a typo, though? Guessing you meant to say Natasha instead of Natalie?

Author's Response:

You're right! I did mean Natasha, whoops!

Thanks for pointing that out!!

Reviewer: ittybittyman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2023 10:55 AM Title: Life in the Tiny City

loved this chapter. I really liked them talking about who they wouldnt want to find them tiny. I hope we hear more about Allys coworker and Natalie

Author's Response: Thank you! That means a lot coming from one of my favorite authors!

Reviewer: Macrophile Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2023 1:18 AM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

Fun story!  I'm looking forward to the next chapter.  I'd like to post my own stories, but haven't got the hang of the site yet!  LOL

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23 2023 9:33 PM Title: Moving to the Small City

Thanks for the chapter!

Guess we’ll see how the city looks so far and what the company wants out of it. And other plans. And maybe some rules orientation too. 

(check out Not Just Bikes for a start on some city design videos, the thing also about why cars are overused could be used later too)

Oh Jazmin is definitely being recoded by someone for theses very much HR-problem comments and potential actions. Even if supposedly her dad owns almost half the company, theres a lot of black mail material from just this. Or if its just to hang it over her head for something else. 

Eagerly await the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed, and I'll definitely check out the Not Just Bikes videos. I can tell based on the titles it's already similar to what I had imagined for Micropolis. I'm definitely leaning more toward bus/tram/trains and the like for transportation over cars. Thank you for sharing!

Jazmin is pretty good about covering her tracks. None of the residents have cell phones since they're difficult to shrink, and only a few have computer access and even less have a camera attached. It'd be difficult to report for your average resident...

However, Justin isn't your average resident and just so happens to have a computer and internet access too. I wonder how Jazmin would react if Justin reported her?

Thank you again for the feedback!