Date: February 06 2024 1:12 PM Title: There will not be more chapters
I feel like you had an unhealthy relationship with writing. For many people writing is a creative outlet, therapeutic even. With the length and frequency of your updates, it seemed like it was more of an obsession. I hope you learn that obsessing over anything can be harmful, including religion. Too much of anything, including good things like a healthy sex life, faith, etc, can become bad when it’s so much that it conflicts with other aspects of life. Just live your life and try to make friends and relationships. If there is a god, then that’s what it would want. Perhaps one day you’ll be in a good enough spot to return to writing, but in a healthier fashion. Good luck to you.
[Report This]Date: February 06 2024 2:24 AM Title: The Night That Changed Everything (Part 2) (6/11 Edit)
Oh, yah... the science of Pokemon. That's reliable, right?
Date: February 06 2024 2:00 AM Title: The life of David Higgs (6/11 Edit)
You seriously went full Kirk Cameron and canceled this over overzealous "religious" reasons?
Fuck you. Seriously, you're the second user on this site who's pulled this crap, the other who wrote the tiny sex-ed class one.
[Report This]Date: August 28 2023 4:04 AM Title: (2x27) Caught
I love in-shoe
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
Date: August 19 2023 5:47 PM Title: (2x18) To The Mall
Interesting chapter. I hope David ends up lost in someone's food, and swallowed. Especially if that food is some stranger that doesn't even know about him.(I love unaware full tour vore with survival)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review, unfortunetly that is not this story. There is a story I have made that is exclusively unaware, and I'm working on a full tour vore chapter of it with survival so look forward to that in the future.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2023 5:20 AM Title: The life of David Higgs (6/11 Edit)
Fun story with a lot of interesting characters. Still, I think it reads like a stream of thought and less like a story. There’s so many characters and going through the paces of each day that I think the story suffers. We have the MMA plot, the cam show plot, this Aubrey thing, Ashley shrinking from him touching her, a whole bunch of characters who have a crush on him or potentially do, the wager, etc. I don’t even remember Penelope, was she introduced for the first time in the last chapter or one much earlier? I’m still going to read because it’s a fun escape, but I think this story would benefit a great deal from focusing on a handful of characters and plotting out a story arc. For me, the bully from his high school is the most interesting antagonist, and the wager is the most interesting plot device. I’d try to figure out a way to combine the two. Maybe the girl who did the wager against Jenna (forgot her name) isn’t actually the one who will be rooming with him. What if she’s in a suite with that bully from his high school. What if the bully bribes her to have him bunk with her instead? Idk, I just wanted to offer my two cents since I like some of the characters but I find myself losing interest when we keep shifting back and forth between so many characters and plot threads.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review, I've been feeling similar about my own story. I don't have a clear line of when a chapter should end or not, I instead just count the words, and once I get to 2000 I make it a chapter. The writing will definitely change after this week is over, and a few plots are taken care of. At this point everyone knows the daily/weekly routine, so I'm gonna start jumping to events special character moments, and breaks.
As for the characters, Ava is the one with the bet, Penelope is Ava's friend, but she and Jenna are really good friends now. THe bully Vanessa is roomming with Stephanie. As far as new characters go, the major characters have already been introduced. Thank you for your input.
Date: August 08 2023 1:26 PM Title: (2x1) New Day
It's nice to see that David got to spend at least a little time with a girl his own size, fleeting though it was. Also a tiny guy was probably right to avoid a party with drunk college girls haha. Anyways good to see you picking the story back up!
Author's Response:
Thanks, man. I know Ashley is a favorite of yours, so the first bunch of chapters centers around her. She won't be in the remainder of the season much afterwards though.
[Report This]Date: August 06 2023 4:49 PM Title: stories, romance, and nightmares (6/11 Edit)
So ends Day One.
Author's Response:
Yeah, in future chapters I'm gonna have it skip around days at a time, since people get the routine at this point. I don't exactly like how it takes so many chapters for just one day.
[Report This]Date: August 06 2023 4:38 PM Title: Jenna's day (6/11 Edit)
At only two inches tall, I'd say it's a safe bet that tennis is NOT David's racket.
;-D
Author's Response:
You could say it would be a NET negative. Not something he'd LOVE to do. They don't deSERVE him.
Date: May 30 2023 5:30 PM Title: The Night That Changed Everything (Part 2) (6/11 Edit)
Scarlet being shrunk is an interesting idea, obviously David will need to help her navigate life at small size it opens up some fun erotic potential. Personally I'm a bit of a sucker for giant girls playing with tiny couples, but that might not be your direction here. Anyways I'm curious as to whether David will gain some measure of control over this newfound ability, and what that might mean for our hero.
From a critical standpoint as others have said you would benefit to put in new paragraph breaks for new speakers in dialogue. It'll help readability immensely. Other than that though this is a fun story so far!
Author's Response:
If it wasn't obvious, Scarlet is only temporarily shrunk, the shrinking at this point in the story only lasts 4 hours
[Report This]Date: May 23 2023 1:05 AM Title: The life of David Higgs (6/11 Edit)
I'm really loving this so far, I hope you keep it up. One thing that maybe be helpful is, whenever a person starts speaking that wasn't speaking before, it should start on a new line. It makes chapters far easier to read, and this story is good enough that I would love it to be as good as possible. Here's an example:
"Dialogue should start on its own paragraph," I said confidently, "and as long as it's the same person that keeps talking, it can just continue like this."
"However," My boyfriend interjects, "When another person starts speaking, that should end the paragraph and start a new one."
"Even if the entire paragraph is just a single line of dialogue?"
"Indeed."
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review, and your kind words!
I have heard the thing about starting a new paragraph when a new character enters the conversation, and I've been working on the bad habit of not doing it, as of this response, (5/22/23) I plan to change the POV to 3rd person, so that will make it easier to remember that.
I hope you enjoy the future chapters.
[Report This]Date: May 06 2023 4:12 AM Title: The life of David Higgs (6/11 Edit)
Generally not a fan of the second person narrative, but at the same time a well constructed narrative and sexy setting! Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks, the second person narrative started from the Interactive story that this story started on, it wasn't my choice, I suppose I could change it if I really wanted to, we'll see.
[Report This]Date: May 02 2023 5:21 AM Title: A Business Venture, and the Workout Club (6/11 Edit)
Wow, I can’t believe I didn’t see this story until now! I love these kinds of school settings! Tiny guy surrounded by all these women, I love it.
My favorite so far might be either Emma or Vanessa and that’s simply because I think it’s fun reading about someone that is horny for David.
I’m also curious if there will be any giantess teachers having their way with David since it was mentioned in the beginning that faculty might use him as well.
So far there is just Miss Bosak and Mrs. Miller. Mrs. Miller seems more interesting of the 2 since she already seems to have a bias of David misbehaving. Or maybe there will be a third teacher that is horny and wants to give David private detention or something. Idk, if you even want to include a teacher since you haven’t had much teacher action yet, but if you do, I’m very interested if you want to discuss it and such.
I also like the rules listed by Miss Bosak in the beginning. There’s some tension when others cross those rules and also I noticed that those rules seem to only apply to students so that might give teachers some advantages.
I also like how most girls want to be in Jenna’s position since she has free access to David all the time basically. That desire from everyone else makes it entertaining as they fight for him.
So far, I’m enjoying this story and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review! The rules stated in the first chapter are the original rules for the Writing.com interactive story "TIny guy in a female college," I've been considering taking those beginning rules out since that and like 3 names and the setting is all that was given at the beginning of the interactive, those rules are mainly for those who add on the the story there. That's why there was so little detail in the highschool chapter as involving underage girls would violate the rules of the story. As for the teachers, I've been thinking about adding something with them, but I might not. If I do, it will likely be unaware.
Emma seems to be a bit of a favorite, as her chapter has more views than any other chapter (Excluding the first one). Vanessa is a bit harder to write as there are many things I want her to do as a character, but those chapters are coming later.
It'd be cool to have someone to talk with about this story, if you use the Giantess World discord, my name is AtleastDecent.
Thank you for your review
P.S. It's just Ms. Miller, she's not married.
Date: April 22 2023 11:26 AM Title: Dynamic David (6/11 Edit)
I’m liking Hazel the most so far, although I want to see more of Skylar
Author's Response:
Thank you for your input, I also like Hazel, and have planned stuff for skylar.
Also that's a pretty great name that you made
Date: April 19 2023 1:41 PM Title: The life of David Higgs (6/11 Edit)
Great story! A few female names to go with are Emily, Alyssa, Sarah, Cassie, Sandra, Claire, Adrienne and Cecilia. Can't wait for the MMA stuff.
Author's Response:
My Dude, you are the first review that I ever got on this site, you know what, I'm writing you into the story. In the future, I might have a girl who is a writer for the in-universe version of Giantess World, and I'll make sure that you are known as the first review in the story as well thank you.
As for the names; Emily is too close to Emma, who's already a character, Claire is already a character in a chapter I will release on chapter 6, Alyssa and Sarah are a bit too close, as I don't want the image of family friends to come to mind when writing this story, as for the other five, They'll probably be used for names of seniors/sorority girls. Thanks a lot!!