Fun story with a lot of interesting characters. Still, I think it reads like a stream of thought and less like a story. There’s so many characters and going through the paces of each day that I think the story suffers. We have the MMA plot, the cam show plot, this Aubrey thing, Ashley shrinking from him touching her, a whole bunch of characters who have a crush on him or potentially do, the wager, etc. I don’t even remember Penelope, was she introduced for the first time in the last chapter or one much earlier? I’m still going to read because it’s a fun escape, but I think this story would benefit a great deal from focusing on a handful of characters and plotting out a story arc. For me, the bully from his high school is the most interesting antagonist, and the wager is the most interesting plot device. I’d try to figure out a way to combine the two. Maybe the girl who did the wager against Jenna (forgot her name) isn’t actually the one who will be rooming with him. What if she’s in a suite with that bully from his high school. What if the bully bribes her to have him bunk with her instead? Idk, I just wanted to offer my two cents since I like some of the characters but I find myself losing interest when we keep shifting back and forth between so many characters and plot threads.

Generally not a fan of the second person narrative, but at the same time a well constructed narrative and sexy setting! Looking forward to more.