[Report This]Date: September 29 2023 9:21 PM Title: Humble Beginnings Pt 2
While I'll admit that a lot of the tech/sci-fi stuff goes right over my head (not your fault, it just isn't my field), these first two chapters were really engaging and the concepts you're using are clearly well thought out / researched. The plot has me hooked.
The down on his luck, blue collar worker begrudgingly teaming up with the crook kidnapping him is a fun dynamic, and I'm excited to see where you take these characters. Martin being tricked into crawling into his coworkers' orifices is a particularly funny detail. The pang of guilt Tenebris feels at the end of chapter 2, along with how polite and gentle she was washing Martin in the sink, is an interesting wrinkle to her otherwise callous character that we'll likely see developed on over the course of the story.
A cool thing with space fiction is the infinite potential of the settings and characters, especially when size stuff is involved. Looking forward to seeing this universe fleshed out through our protagonists journey!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the review! I’m honoured that you read my story, and I’m ecstatic you enjoyed it. Next chapter should be up very soon, and I hope you enjoy it just as much, if not more.
[Report This]Date: September 23 2023 1:18 PM Title: Humble Beginnings Pt 2
If it's not too much to ask, could you include a simple illustration of the station? I'd appreciate it very much, as I was a bit lost at the bulkhead bit :P
Author's Response:
Sure! I’ll probably put it into the story for other people with the same problem. If it doesn’t format well enough for my liking, I’ll link it in the end notes.
[Report This]Date: September 19 2023 2:27 PM Title: Humble Beginnings Pt 2
Nice setup so far. Didn’t know about the blue anus. I may use that in one of my stories. You’re right, the more you know the better you can write and keep it in the realm of semi believable.