Date: February 14 2011 4:53 AM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
Awesome new chapter! glad to see some jennifer action lol. And her feet too :) Hope it's her that eats him in the yogurt hehe. Great work on this whole story man.
Date: January 24 2011 1:52 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
another great chapter E.
Author's Response: thanks
Date: January 24 2011 7:27 AM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
Glad to see this story updated again :) I hope that foot belongs to Jennifer lol. Will she be in this story anymore?
Date: October 06 2010 7:04 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
its great that you updated this.
i'm almost hoping that jake isnt able to find a cure and that bianca keeps him for a while.
Author's Response:
Hey, It could happen.
[Report This]Date: October 02 2010 11:05 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
welcome back! Was hoping for your return lol. I must say, this story is by far my fave on the whole site. And I like alot of stories here. :) It's drawing to a close though? That's too bad lol.Will Jennifer play anymore parts in here?
Date: October 02 2010 4:42 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
Excellent story, welcome back
Author's Response: thanks
Date: September 30 2010 1:22 AM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
Hope you keep updating the story, or any of your other works.
Author's Response:
im going to update these stories and my writing.com interactives for a little bit it all depends on what other people write onmy othe rcharacters to see if i should stay online for a while or take another long break to get rid of th ewriters block i had
Date: September 04 2010 11:22 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
do you plan on finishing this?
Author's Response: yes
[Report This]Date: May 13 2010 3:55 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
great new chapter! looking forward to seeing more of the inside of his sister's boot though.. :)
Author's Response:
he will be seeing much more of his family up close but the conclusion of the next chapter wont have him anywhere near the bottom half of anyones body. at least not yet anyway
[Report This]Date: March 17 2010 12:49 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
I obviously am enjoying this story. That said, the use of Jake and then "You" right after is really, really, really distracting at this point. It's starting to seem as though you aren't sure if you're writing a straight forward story or a Writing.com story of that uses the first person. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: thanks for the constructive critiscism. im going to work on my POV's. when im writing i want to combine both first and third but i havent perfected it yet. i think im going to focus on one POV and only throw a hint of the other.
[Report This]Date: March 11 2010 4:31 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
I have enjoyed your story. For what it's worth, I'm sure whatever ending you devise will turn out great. That said, and as I said before, I'm a fan of violent endings. I'd positively love to see him remain broken and defeated, giving himself to his cousin's feet. I'd love to see her then end his life by slowly crushing him in some manner, preferably using her feet in some manner!
Author's Response: who knows it could happen. i'll give more clues as the stroy progresses. i think everyone will like the ending
[Report This]Date: March 02 2010 9:26 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
I haven't been on in a bit, but I have been reading your story here and this is just beautiful. I love how this story is going, and it is just inspiring to read. Thank you so much. I really don't want to influence the course of events as it is more fun to read, but I really hope he finds himself trapped in the shoes of his family, especially those black furry ugg boots of his sister. The idea of a voyeur unaware approach is really something I love to read. I hope you keep this going. Thanks again!
Author's Response: trapped in the shoes of his family? thats what i planned from the start. i think youll like the most recent chapter added.
[Report This]Date: February 16 2010 11:15 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
This is shaping up to be a fast, fun read. I like your narration; it's descriptive and character driven, but not overly so. Keep up the good work. As a friendly suggestion, I've seen many stories similar to this go on far too long, mine included. I'd love to see this fine story go 2-3 more solid chapters. I also really hope Bianca ends his life beneath her smelly feet by agonizingly and slowly crushing him by scrunching him beneather the folds of her toes after eliminating his invulnrability!
Author's Response:
its more than 2 or 3 chapters becaus i still have to add the family party part. Biancas chapters will end soon then it goes to someone else then im not sure what girl will end up with jake, but i have a pretty good idea of who it will be and i think youll be pleased with the ending.
in fact i think Everbody will love the ending. youll see what i mean.
Date: February 01 2010 2:43 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet
The semi-rhetorical questions posed, re: the character's fate in the very next chapter. At Writing.com, of course, the reader gets to answer that question to his/her own satisfaction. But, here? IT IS THE AUTHOR ALONE WHO GETS TO PULL THE CHARACTER'S PUPPET STRINGS. BWA-HAHAHAHAHAHA!
Ahem! Sorry! *Loosens shirt collar in embarrassment.* Couldn't resist.
Author's Response: lol, yeah i like those semi-rhetorical questions posed, but im trying to make it a little different by changing the time frames around so its kinda like a weird/cool story. the ending will be a little different too. youll see what i mean.