Date: November 04 2015 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
Chapter 18. Being put with the 3 ladies is scary. Amy plucking him and tapping her fingers shows her control. Well done.
Later,
Diesel
Date: April 04 2014 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
I wondered if I'd ever see an update to this story. It's nice to see it back. The American Indians are underappeciated. I think they should pick them as the subject of their school project.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review man. And I agree with you on the American Indians.
Date: April 04 2014 10:31 AM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
I'm really glad you've picked this back up. The details of the physical environment are well-attended-to, but the description of the social environment is where your writing really shines. High schoolers are very hard to write without falling into cliche, mainly because they are still developing their personalities and trying on different roles each day. Meeting someone 1/20th your size could provoke all kinds of experimental reactions...
I appreciate the slow build, too. I can be sustained for weeks be a well-written handheld scene, and you've already logged a dozen beauties.
On a personal note, I'm pretty sure I had Ms. Tritter for Math, too. I remember fondly being personally instructed in the operations of extrapolation. I'm sure Peter would benefit from similar attention.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I find it interesting trying to capture the voice of high schoolers in stories like this, although I benefit from having only been there a couple years ago. I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the slow build too. You're going to see Peter get some more one-on-one with Ms. Tritter eventually.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2014 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
Surprise surprise a update. Do you think I was surprised.
Really good chapter, glad this story is being showed care again.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: April 03 2014 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
Glad you started this back up! Can't wait to read where this goes.
Author's Response:
Thanks! The next chapter will be here sooner rather than later.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2014 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
As I alluded to over in my YouPet review, it really is wonderful to see this being updated again. Outside of Rise of a Princess, this really is my favorite of your works simply because of the opportunity it gives you to flex your extremely impressive range.
The trio continues to entertain in their possessiveness, and one thing I enjoy about their interactions with Peter is that they want him to choose to interact with their group, to the point where they actually put down others in an attempt to impress into his mind that they are the group he wants to associate with. It's a different form of domination than the usual, and it's quite fun to read.
Thanks for the review bud. I'm aware that this and Princess are really my only gentle-focused stories, which is something I intend to work on at some point. The domination aspect of it is something I was eager to play on in a story like this since these kinds of girls would be doing it much more subtly than the psychos I normally write about.
Author's Response:
[Report This]Date: April 03 2014 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
I hated group projects, when I was Pete's age. If their goal was to teach equality of teamwork, they always failed. Miserably! In fact, I remember one wise-ass quipping:
"There may not be an 'I' in 'team.' But, the fourth and second letters do spell 'me!' "
Author's Response:
I hear ya there. Of course, the workload that gets put on him is going to end up being the least of Pete's worries.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2014 8:29 AM Title: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling
I for one don't mind that you take long breaks, however I can see why that would bother people.
As for the story, I felt this chapter was overall very good.
Lisa is developing into a superb passive giantess. However, it's Amy, Sharon, and Kimmy that steal this chapter. They're behavior is situated in that uncanny valley between sadism and possessiveness and I found it quite effective given the situation.
They clearly see him as a person, but also as a object to be dominated and used for leverage. This pattern of interaction towards Peter is precisely what I'd expect from a group of high school girls.
*sigh*
Oh Jacksmith. If only I had your level of writing expertise. *wishes hopefully*
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for the review good sir. I really appreciate what you're saying about Amy, Sharon, and Kimmy; I've been putting effort into making them be manipulative giantess characters without forgetting that they're also just teens.