Date: January 02 2017 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
Very nice culmination of events. Particularly effective was Peter's inner narrative intertwined with the hints of Lisa's emotional states as signaled by her body/facial-language. This allowed the dramatic exchange to carry the reader towards the embrace with the wavering, hesitant pace of two same-sized actors in a fraught scene rather than dwelling on the fact that Lisa was in complete control of just how close Peter came (or didn't come) to her. Even if the scene and the dialogue called for Peter to physically embrace Lisa, she alone determined their proximity; if she deflated or let her arms relax or otherwise held him distant, he couldn't force the issue. But since we were so caught up in their emotional exchange, their embrace seemed mutual rather than unilateral.
And that, my friends, is authentic characterization.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much, and I'm glad someone picked up on this. I always love when other macro stories have an echo of how the scene would play if everyone was more equal-sized. In this case, Peter has to lean forward a bit, but Lisa is still completely in control of distance.
[Report This]Date: January 02 2017 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
Finally, the long awaited kiss! Also, Lisa is growing in her ability to defend herself. I sense she'll no longer allower herself to be pushed around by the other girls at school. She knows what (or who) she wants and she's going for it!
Nice play on words with the chapter title.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! We're steadily seeing Lisa growing (hehe) into her own skin.
[Report This]Date: January 01 2017 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
YES!
What a great way to start off the New Year, here. With Peter and Lisa achieving full-on lip lock...and so poignantly, too!
There's no going back, now. :-)
Author's Response:
I thought it would be nice to let Peter have a New Years kiss after all the crap I've put him through.