[Report This]Date: January 13 2013 4:11 AM Title: Oh No!
Dear Mr./Ms./Mrs. Defright
One, I have just realized it is hard to tell a person's gender over the computer. Usually I'd make note of it and say it should be able to but... I am afraid of what the computer would have to do to prove a person's gender.
Two, oh my god is this a good story! I have nothing to offer for right now, but I will certainly give you a few pointers when I find it needed.
Ecstatic reader,
Ghostbuster5
Date: January 01 2013 9:18 AM Title: Oh No!
A good chapter. The plot twist at the end was unexpected, and I suppose welcome. Hopefully they can find the antidote. You're doing alright as the author. The more you write the more you'll inprove. Come back to a chapter after a few days or weeks and your bound to notice things that you'll want to change.
[Report This]Date: December 31 2012 10:30 PM Title: Oh No!
Thanks, Defright.
Your story moves along slowly, but it's well done and quite believable (once you accept the shrinking process). When you give it some thought, most would realize that a shrunken person could not survive very long without protection and aid. He/she would either succumb to natural threats and hazards or would become sick from trying to eat scraps of rotting food or other indigestible plant-stuffs. Long-term survival would depend on someone or some group of people who would care for you. This what makes your story so believable.
Now make it more arousing by taking it toward sexual experimentation.
[Report This]Date: December 31 2012 4:26 PM Title: Oh No!
I like plot twist, and this is close. But I like your story so far.
As always, I will say fix spelling, and a good short read.
Good story man.