[Report This]Date: January 23 2013 8:44 PM Title: Relationship Issues
It wasn't an anxiety nightmare? Rats! I hate guessing wrong.
Author's Response:
Haha, good assumption maybe I'll add that to a different story one day!
Date: January 22 2013 10:33 PM Title: Relationship Issues
I have been following this story for some time now. I am in between on torture and gentle so don't expect me to be swooning over this. First things first.
Criticisms. You have a good plot line, but some parts are hard to understand due to choppy grammar, placement of words, and lack of conjunctions, commas, etc. It can feel awkward in places to read because it's hard to undertand what the characters are saying.
Compliments. You have a good story line going on here. A typical love story, so it seems, and then a deep betrayal by his love. Now his trust may never be restored and he may never love her again. It's a good story and I feel that you are really good at bringing out the gentle side of the giantess. I foresee some cruelness too so good job.
All in all, I think Defright, that you are an aspiring author and only time can tell if you are going to be a great one.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2013 10:12 PM Title: Relationship Issues
Good job man. I really like the direction you're taking this. I'm frankly amazed Luke can even backsass a giantess after what he'd been through over the past few months.
I see your improvement growing ever so much. I am definitely going to follow your sequel.
Author's Response:
Thanks that means a lot to me. Luke had kinda snapped there without thinking.