Very nice job so far. I can't wait to see what you have in store for our two heroines.

Nice beginning, so far - the introductions are important to immerse in the story (and I may know it better than many), but he should have told her about it before shrinking (yes, even knowing she would not believe - it is important to prepare) - and even then shrinking himself would be so much better to ease her into this.

I do not mean to criticize your plan, but it seems Cindy would be afraid, petrified even - at relative 45 feet tall Toni must seem like small office building - only moving and vivid... in such situation - upon discovery of the impossible - she would be speechless, scared out of her wits... or at least angry for what he did to her - and most certainly not "wet and tingly", that is unless they had a common history of being attracted to those kinds of things.

As for the characters, it is nice that You are trying to tell a story in the background and I hope they eventually tell us why their relationship was cold in the first place to better understand their size spiced interactions.

5 stars because I can see the potential - if you keep the consistency and creatively explore various things they may do instead of just limiting to naughty parts play (which tends to happen in a lot of stories - I think we have enough).

Also - personally I find the idea of being recorded in such situations disgusting.. not sure if any females would like to see their private parts themselves - they are fun for the other gender, but I do not think many of non-narcissistic people consider their own parts very alluring.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the reivew.  Easing her into it may be have been a better way to go about it now that I think about it.  I kind of liked the element of surprise though. I guess I had to use a pit of the poetic license on that one. I don't want this to be one off story meant soley for... gratification but at the same time I don't want to wait to long to get to the meaty part of the story I'm hoping to strike a balance here.