[Report This]Date: August 04 2016 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 37
This. This is why I read your stories. Excellent stuff, lance.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2016 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 37
Well, now: I've caught up a bit to this chapter (37), and I'm still hanging in and enjoying your writing.
A note here... You're probably writing a bit fast at times, so you don't notice that you sometimes forget to complete a word (like forgetting to add -ed to a past tense verb). It's not too serious here, but if you want to write professionally, you need to proof-read your product. Granted, you'll probably have an editor for that, and that's one of his jobs to ensure that the quality is where it should be. But it is a good habit to develop yourself. It will help you avoid such things in the future.
Date: June 21 2016 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 37
Nice exposition about the immune systems of the different races, giants and dwarves being more resistant than the others.
Author's Response: A lot of information was given out this chapter; Dwarven waterfall, immune systems, Icarus' abilities and mysterious knowledge. The next chapter should have even more information that you guys would find useful. After that would be a fun relaxing chapter that everyone would enjoy. Truthfully I'm probably going to go on a week or two hiatus. I've written 5 chapters and haven't got that much feedback. Maybe after a few weeks I'll release another chapter and see how it is received from there. Until then thanks for the review!