Date: April 26 2014 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's a good start, and I like the story so far, although you should separate out the speeh so that your story is easier to follow. Sometimes there's speech inside paragraphs. Each character should be on a new line, that's how I've always been taught.
Author's Response:
Yea, it's various ways to write it I'm guessing, because the way I've been writing it was the way I learned to write from other writers. I can't necessarily say if its right or wrong, more or less the style of story telling I'm assuming. Also, I'm trying to get the format right when I post up the chapter and it's being really difficult.
[Report This]Date: April 25 2014 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Ooo. Me likey so far.
Date: April 25 2014 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
@MrSirk, ya, Alex could be cruel to him now, but ya, after thinking about it, who knows, maybe she likes him secretly, but doesn't any to show it?
Date: April 25 2014 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
I wonder why she volunteered for this experiment if she doesn't want to live with a normal size person. Maybe all she wanted was to be a giantess? I agree with others, the guy needs to get out of there and hopefully meet someone a lot nicer. Keep up the writing!
Date: April 25 2014 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Id rather be on the streets than with that nasty broad! I think he should get the hell out while he still has the chance!
Author's Response:
Aww :D lol I'm sure she isn't as bad as she seems....But then again...I could be wrong. lol
Date: April 25 2014 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
Of course continue! I want to know so much more!
[Report This]Date: April 24 2014 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Keep it up. More interaction and background please. Surely he can ignore her and come to find out she had the fetish. Lol
Date: April 24 2014 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
I can tell this was written by a person who waswritten before. I like the concept, it is clear, easy to under stand, not convoluted, and when I read how Alex is acting, you made me feel disgust in her attitude.
Please continue.
[Report This]Date: April 24 2014 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is an awesome story so far!.. Have read a few mixed sizes stories like A Different View, and Adam And Ashley.. This is already right up there with the two previously mentioned stories, & this is just chapter 1 ,:)
Wonder how Alex will put up with Jaden in the next chapters?... She seems very similar to Amy fromWhos Really the Bigger Person Here
[Report This]Date: April 24 2014 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
It seems a really good start to a story, I love how she's so brutal and uncaring towards him :) really looking forward to seeing more!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you do. I plan on writing more since this is my first attempt. I'm actually surprised to find a female interested in this.
Date: April 24 2014 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm interested. Good setup and the great thing is you can take this story in so many directions. Maybe they find common ground, maybe they stay at odds with each other. There's potential there.
Author's Response:
Just wait for more chapters and let's see where it's goes. Your right though. The possibilities are endless.
Date: April 24 2014 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Well, she seems nice...
Author's Response:
I know isn't she just precious. Lol