Date: May 07 2014 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 13
Ava is an expert hacker? Hm, ok. That was a bit random. I was not expecting that. Good chapter though, I enjoyed it.
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Tasha did in face want to have Crystal under foot,
You mean: fact
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You want to have to stay here anymore.
You mean: won't
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have been a hell of lot worse
You mean: a lot
Author's Response:
Random things aren't meant to be expected lol. That's why their random....or was it plannrd....nobody knows but me.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2014 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 13
On the bright side, after that shithead Ryan is killed in the most satisfying and humiliated way possible, you've established enough of a universe to make a sequel if you feel like making one eventually.
Seriously, is it okay to say that Ryan ia a worse person than Adolf Hitler? Because Hitler at least indirectly helped fix the world economy after the Great Depression, and was kind to dogs.
Author's Response:
Lmao, wow Ryan topped hitler? That's a pretty big feat to accomplish. You have to be real low for that one. Also @tinyguy their spring break started when Jaden got there....I'd say it's around Tuesday now. I'm trying to stretch it a week but that may be too long....well see though.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2014 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 13
Awesome job once again...
A suggestion, maybe if all the stuff with Ryan is getting to be too much, there could always be a bit of a break, maybe showing how Jaden gets on at his new school, kinda like ultradude's stories?.. After all, Alex said Jaden would meet more people., and spring breaks gotta be over by now. Or are you saving that idea for a sequel depending on how this all ends?
PS/ 100 + reviews on you're first story is amazing... Should defenerlh keep writing after this story's over
Author's Response:
To be honest I was saving the high school drama for a sequel....but like you said it depends on how this ends.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2014 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 13
Why the emotions? WHY?!?!?! Damn you, brilliant chapter as always, and can you please somehow make Ryan crueler? Have him kill both Tasha and Crystal by inserting Crystal into Tasha's vagina and fucking the vagina, afterward killing Tasha of course!
But in all reality, I've basically never been able to actually remember the names of any characters from most books or might movies, your story has some of the most memorable characters!
Author's Response:
You're a violent one aren't you lol and thank you for the compliment, I try to make my character as memorable and real as possible. Although, I must admit, I didn't think they would get so much of a buzz as they have been getting.