Date: May 19 2014 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 14
That was a nice chapter. I did enjoy it but I found some mistakes, only minor ones though:
Here:
The morning pass by quickly as
You mean either:
The morning passes by quickly as
But it could also be:
The mornings pass by quickly as
Here:
Some was laughing, some playing,
You mean:
Some were laughing, some playing,
Here:
“Sounds like you two are having fun?”
This is not a question and so does not require a question mark.
Here:
be harm by regular means
You mean: harmed
Date: May 15 2014 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 14
Awese chapter, and great cliffhanger!
Date: May 15 2014 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 14
Commander Richards, facing down an angry giantess with nothing but a rifle, a uniform, and the ground he stands. He's officially now my favorite character. Cause honestly, a guy like that deserves major respect. I'm going to be very sad if/when he dies.
This is easily the best chapter in a while because Ryan isn't present. Sure hope Jaden and Commander Richards team up to kick mega-fucker ass! Ryan must die a most gruesome death.