[Report This]Date: September 19 2014 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 2: THE BASEBALL & THE BOY FROM BEYOND
Wow, this is pretty good. Ann is awesome! But I'm lost...how did she become so evil? The vorophilic Ann in chapter 1 seems nothing like the sweet, considerate Ann of chapter 2.
As far as the writing style, I like when you switch to non-exposition, i.e., showing instead of telling. For example the dialog between Ann and Wendell, dropping small bits of food, etc. More of that please. :)
Of course if she ends up eating or hurting Wendell later on her path to becoming the Ann of chapter 1, I'll probably cry, so don't do that.
Author's Response:
Well, not to ignore your requests, but I've already written the entire 80 chapters. So I can't alter the method of delivery. I'm just posting one a day so as not to overload the readers. However, I can tell you that you've got 76 more chapters to enjoy with nobody at all being eaten. As for the vorophile, she did ask his position and went about it politely. Also the Ann in the 1950s flashback narrative is a teenager. The Ann in 1996 is in her 50s.
I actually started with the vore idea, and thought it would (as you so wonderfully put it) be surreal indeed to have her tell the little guy in great detail of the life she had, before going on to eat him.
I'm not into homicidal or suicidal vore. As a Christian, I'd find that wrong, and my own fantasy would be to teleport out of the girl's tummy and survive, avoiding being digested. I'm glad you're enjoying this though. As it turns out you'll mostly see what you want in your requests, except for the very last two chapters in 76 days' time. You could just tune out when they get posted eventually.