[Report This]Date: October 21 2014 3:57 PM Title: Chained
The prison was a great idea, and the teeth to separate the cuffed men. The by play between Dustin and Jessica is now the hilight of the story. I rarely subscribe to a story as a favorite, just browse most recent, but this one has me rivetted.
[Report This]Date: October 14 2014 11:37 PM Title: Chained
It seems like Jessica's succumbed to the worst type of madness, the type where a bit of your conscience is still there and fighting, but every day you slip a little more into the cesspool of insanity until you don't remember who you are. If I were in Jessica's situation, I'd be SCREAMING for the army to nuke me.
[Report This]Date: October 14 2014 4:14 PM Title: Chained
Wow she is truly and irrevocably fucked. The prison was nothing more then an excuse for her to eat people guilt free. Wonder if aliens are to blame for her size as an act of war towards mankind... Unlikely but seems the only explanation I could think of besides it being a dream or virtual reality or something... I mean why else is the taste of people so delicious for her? Almost like she's starting to rely on instinct and lose all that made her human. I'm hoping she finds out about guy's(forgot his name) infidelity. Also when will she find her parents if they live? And will she use her "boyfriend" for her pleasure, without killing him and also hope she finds said boyfriends new girlfriend.
Anyways awesome story and I really liked the part with the prison. Can't wait to see more from you.
aaron
[Report This]Date: October 14 2014 1:23 PM Title: Chained
I guess thats it then. Its clear that shes not right in the head anymore. Firstly, even if human tastes better to her if she really cared shed suck it up and eat animals instead..But more importantly, when she arrived at the prison she ate guards and prisoners alike!
And what happened to her 10 people rule? A prison has a lot more people than that! I guess Dustin is right she needs to die. I kinda find it odd that the military hasnt engaged her yet with the big guns, I think that even if she were a gentle gts that prolly woulda happened by now. Good story though, Im not as sympathetic towards Jess after this chapter but im still looking forward to more!
Date: October 14 2014 11:10 AM Title: Chained
Glad to see you're back, now for the review.
I should point all of this is from Michael's point of view which mixes all of it with his fear of Jessica eating him so we might need to hear from Jessica's side to further understand everything that is going on.
Having said that, I find myself agreeing with him that Jessica really needs to die. She seems to be getting off on their deaths, it is more than sustenance now. I really wish it hadn't come to this but this is what you seem to be building to.
Eating prisoners is still eating people I agree but the least evil thing she could do would be to eat people on death row because lets be honest here, there is a different level of severity to each crime and a rapist is not the same as say...a con artist. I would not be against Jessica eating a murderer or a rapist but those in on more minor crimes don't deserve it.
Maybe...just maybe there is a compromise but that is looking very unlikely right now.