Date: September 20 2017 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 12
Wow.....this chapter was a tough read. Mostly because if it isn't obvious I highly sympathize with Nancy. The character I've read. The woman that so desperately wanted a family, to be a mother. The woman whose only crime was that she was selfish. The woman who can still love her stepdaughter after countless humiliations. She doesn't deserve what's happened to her. She doesn't deserve to lose her humanity. And it really resonates with me because I'm currently working with similar ideas in my own writing although nowhere near as polished as it is here. I really want Nancy to have a happy ending but I fear it's too late. I don't know if she's capable of coming back from this and finding peace and closure as a pet is a bittersweet ending to her story.......but that's how the dice rolls sometimes boys!!!!
I feel nothing for Pig. Mostly because his character is pretty shallow and it was very clear what was going to be his fate, also because abusive dad's suck and it's easy to hate him. I will say this. If Peyton's that broken up about killing a guy she literally hated I don't think she has the stomach to go through with her threats on Twerp. Not that it matter now. Twerp's already broken. Peace out! Great chapter! High score which it totally arbitrary by this point.
I really like nancy as character myself. She's a strong woman. I can sympathize with her alot too. She definately made mistakes and who hasn't, but she doesn't deserve what has happened to her. I don't know if she loses her humanity in the end. Its all matter of perspective on how you view the ending. I haven't edited that chapter yet so i can't say anything is final. I will be curious to see how you feel after reading it.
Pig always was intended to be a shallow character. He's easy to hate. He's relatively one dimensional. In another medium i would have spent more time interacting and showing more dynamics between him, avery and his wife. However, I didn't feel people would want to read that. So i didn't include anything like that in the story. Just in the outline. Even with that, the reader i feel gets the general gist. He's a drunk, and abusive, and isn't really father material.
I don't think Peyton could kill Nancy/Twerp. She definately cares more then she shows her stepmother. Peyton isn't really the murderous type of person so it definately weighed on her. If it weren't for avery she probably never would have done it. Don't give up on Twerp yet! I have your story small on my list to read after I finish writing this story. All my free time has been devoted to this story and editing the chapters. I really like premise of it.