Reviewer: NotSirk Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2017 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 17

First of all. Thanks for the shoutout!

Second: Wow. Totally unfair! But honestly I knew this story would end on a bittersweet note. Nancy List is dead and even worse she has to bear the full responsibility for her and Douglass' infidelity. That's what irks me most. Did she force Douglass into cheating? Did she make him divorce his wife? These were choices the man made in equal parts with her yet she's shouldering that burden and serving as a slave to Peyton the rest of her life. Peyton has to know that's unfair and that what's she's doing to Twerp isn't justice. I'd say it's even past revenge. I don't think Peyton will ever come to regret what she's done (especially not with Sabrina who has admitted she's just a petty and vindictive bitch influencing her partially) but I hope eventually she does or at least matures some. Regardless of her part in breaking a commited relationship Nancy List was a good person and a good mom. I would say moreso than Peyton's own mother who I've only known for a chapter and was ready to kill her husbands mistress on the spot at her most vulnerable. I would even wager there were problems in the marriage already or was Nancy just such a fine piece Dougy couldn't pass her up? The cancer probably didn't help though. But I hope one day Peyton realizes her fathers not innocent in all this and that Nancy wasn't some demon or a "Step monster"

Until then that girl better devote her life to taking care of Twerp! I mean yeah, she's gonna be horrible and make Twerp work way past what karma she's earned and them some, but she better never let that tiny get hurt, because that tiny is a much stronger and better human than she could ever be and for some reason she still loves her as a daughter! I hope Twerp finds peace and happiness as a pet and maybe even one day finds some of Nancy List again. Nancy List is a survivor. Twerp is the absolute proof of that. Good story. I hope to see these characters again and I wish Twerp as many happy days as she can make for herself, because no one else is gonna give em to her.

See ya! 0 STARS!!!!!!!

Edit: Sorry had to delete and repost my comment because I forgot somethings. Mainly

What happened to officer Daniels? He was barely mentioned. Is he still just chilling in Peyton's mouth? I feel kind of bad that I just forgot about him although I can see that being something intrinsic to his character in the long run. No one remembers Daniels.

That was it really. I could go into a whole analysis on Peyton's character and lingering questions about her motives and morality but I just hope she shows Twerp some compassion every now and then. Doesn't let Sabrina be a total bitch to her everyday of the week. And maybe give her that bed even if she hasn't earn that insane goal of ten thousand merits. Peyton will forget how many Twerps earned before that ever happens. And maybe scratch Twerp the way she likes that's so easy for Peyton to do and that she admits she enjoys. 

That's really it this time. Byes. 

 

Reviewer: TheDARGX Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13 2017 2:59 PM Title: Chapter 17

For one thanks for the shout out bro! For two what an amazing story. Just incredible from start to finish, you have a very special talent my friend. Keep up the great work, I'm forever a fan and I can't wait for what you write next!

Cheers!!