Didn't Notsirk create an inspiring world? 

Okay, I love the symbolism of the phantom itch, how it ties to his fears and memories.  Literally an itch you can’t scratch.  Very powerful.

The language of the piece is very subtle yet powerful.  Wonderfully written, very smart and artful. 
I realize you are not writing in your native language, but in chapter one you used terms that suggested  Alaric was alive and in chapter two you describe him as being beaten to death.  So I have to ask. is he alive? 

The best advice I could give you is to use dialogue more.  I realize Alejandro is isolated, but it limits our perception of the world and costs your your story tension to rely so much on his internal narrative.  It will bring the family around him to life if we get to hear them speak in their own words.  We can understand better how they relate to each other if we get to see them interacting. 

Your story is dark and even haunting.  I applaud you for taking the time and effort to share your tale with us.  In Alejandro you have a character that immediately has our sympathies. 

I do find myself wondering how all those majors who thought that Mac Ferlan would and should have Alejandro reacted to him after.  A dialogue scene that showed how they had “consigned him to his fate” would have been a useful device to contrast how they reacted afterwards.  Look up writing advice on “show don’t tell” type of writing and you’ll see what I’m talking about.

That said, your use of the English is beautiful, bordering on poetic.  You should be so proud of your work here, it really makes you feel for your protagonist.  Keep at it, your muse is clearly with you. 

Peace

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