Date: July 18 2019 8:44 PM Title: Introductions are in order
And two last things: Think about the end of the story. Doesn't need to be thought down to details. Just in general. I know it's strange when the story has just begun, but, it helps the process of creation when you have a general idea of the story you want to tell. Too many good stories like this in the site that are simply dropped or take years without reaching a conclusion and it would be a pit to see that to happen with your chracters.
Also, now that the introductions are over, focus on the fetish parts. Start to crack Max world. You could use Megan in the next chapter as she will be coming back from the cinema and Ashley will be busy atending to Alexis all night and Max will not want to disturb By the morning you shift back to Alexis.
I swear I will stop with the long tips. It's your story and it's a good one. Your writing is not bad. Just some missing words here and there, but it's very clean.
Thank you and rooting to see this story till the end. Good Luck!
Date: July 18 2019 7:53 PM Title: Introductions are in order
I am amazed with how quick you came up with a fetish situation that fiits in so natural into the narrative (chapter 5) while also making progress in worldbulding (the part of the couples of different sizes as well as a bit of the protagonist past in chapter 4).
Now, the only thing that ended up feeling too formal and specific for the context was Ashley saing "he has the same rights that we do"(ch. 5). I understand your intention, but, only the part "“Actually, we don’t pick Max up without permission" would suffice as it implies he is perceived as their equal. But, that is just my perpective and surely not a problem.
I liked how you described the situations in chapter 5. People seem to enjoy when there is detais. For instance, the smell, the shape of the toes, the color of the soles, if there is dirt in it and the various sensations and feelings of the tiny as well the giantess... all that maximize the sensation tha Max is very small and powerless when confronted with the other chracters.
As always, looking forward for the next chapters. I am curious to see where you are going with the dinamic between the brother and sisters. Too many possibilities! Keep it up! Added you and your story to the favorites.