Date: July 31 2019 11:27 AM Title: Ashley Plays Along
This one is going to be long. Sorry, but, I had this ideas yesterday and wanted to share. Glad that the reviews are helping, so here is another one :) Just a quick note before: Ashley = worst caretaker ever kkkkkkkkkkkkk
There are many ways to develop the story from here on. I see where you are going introducing the barista (Liz) and making Max durable. Most stories introduce a third part to play the love that will save the hero sanity at the end, the light of hope at the end of the tunnel. But, you can do exactly the opposite and use her as the road to the main character total despair. Let me elaborate.
Max hopes for a romantic relationship with a RP, but, what if she already has someone? Or what if this experience with Alexis ends up having consequences that separate Max even from the RP community? It's clear this isn't Alexis first RP torture, but, if they are humans, that is a crime and she would sooner or later getting caught. What if she knows something, like sideeffects from stress and depression on a RP, that the sisters don't know about? A side effect like shrinking even more! That could be the turning point for Megan and Ashley... when they find him, obviously kkkkkkkkkk
Now, for Max development. Alexis doesn't just want him to behave like a slave, this chapter made it clear she wants him to feel like a pice of shit... quite literally. So, when he is suffering, you could show his conscience and how he starts to rationalize the situation: "Oh Megan is evil with me? It's my fault for laughing at her BO and not understand her feelings. Oh Ashley goes along with Alexis? I deserve, for I am just a burden for them. Finally, at least, I am being able to please my sisters".
That way, his personality starts to warp and turning for the worst. Most don't want Max to be phsically hurt, me too, but, in my opinion, it's also necessary for the actions of the chracters to have meaning, consequences that can't be undone and that will make our protagonist even more dependent from his family and isolated from the rest of the world. So, shrinking even more is the logical answer.
Also, can't wait for Megan to realize she is being deceived and have all thrown at her face - that she is the cumplice of a crime, that she is a hypocrite and have no way to stop Max misery and demise, at least for the time being.
Once again, sorry for the long comments. Those are all the ideas I had before going to sleep yesterday and wanted to share. Thank you for creating this universe with wonderful characters.
Author's Response:
I dont want to spoil where things are going but I will say that it isnt in Max's nature to give up hope for a regular life. He might get beaten down and punished but in his heart he will always be fighting for his freedom. That being said, he is a smart enough man to know when to submit to the will of an angry or horny giantess.
As far as the barist goes, I do in fact plan on continuing to help develop that relationship and there will be definately be interaction between the two of them and some gigantic folks.
No need to apologize for leaving long reviews, as I very much appreciate the feedback. There's no guarantee that a review will influence the story, but I am always thinking about how things will progress so it doesnt hurt to try! Thanks for showing your support!