Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: August 20 2019 7:25 AM Title: Unhealthy Relationship

I Forgot about the side stories question. I think your idea of letting some memories out of the main story line to make spin offs pretty neat. That way, you don't comprmise the main plot and don't end up dragging the story than necessary. For an example, lets take Alexis past. You could make a side story all of it's own, with Alexis when she is paying for her deeds and start rememoring all the tinies she hurt, including her father and starts questioning why. I think you will have much more freedom and time to do stuff like that when the main story is finished, otherwise you will end up having to work on two texts at the same time, which can compromise the quality and updates of the main story.

 

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: August 19 2019 6:23 PM Title: Unhealthy Relationship

First, thank you for your response on my last comment. Very glad to know you are not annoyed by my theories :D It's incredible! Your story and characters are just so good and I am reading since day one. And now we approach the final arc! And, oh my God! What a emotional rollercoaster those last chapters were. Both thumbs up!! 

I know it might not be your intention (or, maybe it is), but, with each chapter I come to hate Ashley and Megan more. You see many people might not like Alexis. Well, she is the villain. But, with Ashley and Megan, it already surpassed the mere fact they are family. Max did absolutely nothing but love his sisters, doing absolutely nothing to deserve this kind of treatment from both of them! Family or not family, right now both only seem as evil and nuts as Alexis to me.

Megan tortured 3 innocent people along the story for her own pleasure, one of them being her own flesh and blood which she just abbandoned with someone she knew was dangerous to him, without not even bothering to look back! No! She picked her payment for seeling Max and went home to have some fun with a complete stranger. Her slave!

As for Ashley, after this chapter, with Max opening his heart to her, pratically confessing to her, and she... tortures him! When he is hurt! After a almost death experience! I know it seems I am just venting my angry, which I won't deny, BUT, there is a reason, and this reason is a question that have been bugging me for some time: why Max loves his sisters?? Why bother answering them or doing anything?

Save his twin sister? The one that will torture him for her own selfish interests all the way home? Or the one who abbandoned him at the cabin? After all this, how he don't just disconnect from himself?

God! This last chapters! I just hope some major character development happens to Megan, like a really big change of heart. Why not for Ashley? Simple, because even though all the talk about Max being her twin brother, she choose the villain, so she is also a villain.

How Max could reconect with Megan? By helping the little slave scape. After the trip back with Ashley, he will be broken and, in an joint attempt to scape his own house with the slave, he ends up getting the short stick, being caught by Megan while the other scapes to ask for help and end up finding Liz. From here on is that it gets trick, because I don't believe only crying or talking will be enough. After this last chapters, it is clear that his suffer, plain and simple, isnt enough.

What do I mean? That Max will have to go a little crazy. His sisters don't care for his humanity? Good. Than he must be an animal, right? Not a brother, but an animal. Maybe he was an insect all along dreaming he was Max... this kind of thing, to the point he starts acting like an actual insect (charging at cockroaches and spiders, eating dirt from the ground, maybe attempting to eat Megan shit when she dumps him in the toilet again (so much for her speech, saying she went overboard and felt sorry at the cabin).

Now that we are nearing the end, I just can't thank you enough for your dedication, always posting and answering the reviews. What I can do is asure to you I will read until the very last chapter! :DD

Author's Response:

I very much want to respond to all the points in this review, but I think it will be better if I let you read what happens and hear youir thoughts afterwards. Chapter 33 begins a huge turning point in the story and I would hate to ruin the surprise for everyone. 

 

That being said, I am eager to hear your throughts on all of our main characters when we reach the end. I'm curious to see if the readers are picking up on the motivations behind each character as I tell their stories. 

 

Thank you so much for reading, and I'll see you at the finish line!