Date: August 27 2019 2:16 AM Title: Moving Out Pt. 2
I am gonna keep this review short as this chapters portrayed a very unexpected route and I am now more curious than ever to know how things are going to play out.
I felt Megan change of heart was too fast. I understand she is not like Alexis but she had her power trips and was thrilled with the goddess treatment, even dreaming of being a giantess destroying everything in ch. 21 (if I am not mistaken). I just think it was too easy for Ivan, a complete stranger, to do all that in two chapters when we know Megan was much less understanding with her last boyfriend and Max.
Yes, they resisted. Ivan didn't. But resisting is part of the thrill, part of the power trip is it not? I guess the biggest question of these two chapters is "why?" Why the sudden change? Why Megan treated Ivan with so much more care than she displayed with her last boyfriend and Max? Max pratically begged for her to stop in some chapters and, although moved (sometimes) Megan didn't seem to care enough as to sacrifice her fun time. The same can be said of the boyfriend in the memories chapter.
PLEASE, DO NOT GET ME WRONG! THE TWO CHAPTERS WERE GREAT AND I CAN UNDERSTAND MEGAN'S CHANGE. IT WAS JUST AN UNEXPECTED TURN OF EVENTS AS I ALWAYS UNDERSTOOD SHE CARRIED A LOT FOR HER BROTHER AND I AM REALLY GLAD TO SEE HER ACTUALLY CRY FOR MAX SAKE, BUT SEEM TO HAVE MISJUDGED HER CHARACTER MOTIVATIONS.
AND I AGREE WITH EVERYONE: YOUR WRITING IS THE BEST AND I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WERE YOU WILL TAKE THE STORY NEXT.
EVERYONE CAN SEE YOU HAVE PUT YOUR HEART INTO BUILDING YOUR CHARACTERS. AS ALWAYS, THANK YOU AND PLEASE KEEP UP THE MARVELOUS WORK :)
PS. I still have to read the spin off. I will read it for sure, but I prefer to wait for the end of the main story. One emotional rollercoaster at a time kkkkkkkk
PS 2: Actually had to rewrite this review twice! Mixed feelings as Megan is also my favorite character but her cycle is aparently coming to a close XDD
Author's Response: Hello again! Thanks so much for another detailed review! You can see in a comment response that I posted just below this, my explanation for exactly why Megan made the change. And to your point, Ivan’s response was a huge part of why this change happened the way it did. He was broken, he didn’t fight back and he took a lot of the thrill out of it for her. He’s crushed spirit cut past her desire to play with a tiny and revealed her innate desire to be a decent caring human being. The boyfriend, he was scared and resisted. That thrills Megan but deep down she knows that he has an ass fetish so she has no reason to pity him. Ivan in the other hand offered no joy from being toyed with. Hopefully this helps to explain the change of heart. I admit that those chapters were a struggle for me to get across all the inner feelings that I wanted to portray. I appreciate the feedback as this helps me see that I need to improve my ability to write down more details of my characters inner conflicts, since the reader can’t see what is inside my mind. As always thank you so much for reading and helping me to improve!
Date: August 26 2019 5:46 PM Title: Moving Out Pt. 2
Man, i´m from Argentina (sorry in advance for bad english). It happens that I study to be a profesor of literature. Your characters building is just amazing. Why Meg suddenly change her mind? I undestand your doubts about how to show the understanding of her acts.
I say again thank you for this amazing story, so full and deep.
I just can hope that the new chapter will come soon.
And again ( I won´t get tired)
Thank you very much!!!!
(really) this is good reading.
Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for leaving a review! I guess I’m my mind, Meg’s change of heart was brought on by a few factors. First, she really does love her brother. Sure she likes to torment him a bit, but deep down she loves him. Now when she begins to understand what a vile person Alexis is, she becomes more and more concerned for the well being of her brother. She begins to fear that he is in mortal danger, and it is her fault for putting him in that situation. Now as for why she treated Ivan so much better than she had planned, is because she was beginning to fear that she was the same sort of monster that Alexis was. This drove her to overcome her inner desires. Thank you so much for reading! I hope you stick around for the finale!