Date: February 07 2021 5:43 PM Title: Processed
Hmm, well written but doesn't seem to make sense in the world you built. If being eaten is fatal would she be dead by now? Especially if she traveled farther down and through the intestine, she'd be fully digested by that point. I realise it's a fantasy with unrealistic aspects, just feels like I'm either missing some fact from earlier or its a contradiction. Plus it takes all the stakes out of it. If she can survive digestion why be scared of anything? I love this story otherwise as hope you continue, but this whole part kinda takes you out of the world with the lack of consequences and bending of reality without further explanation. I realize there was the Brian bit earlier, but tbh I kinda skimmed that part for the same reasons.
Author's Response:
Yes, being eaten isn't inherently fatal in this story. Not everyone knows that, as it's more of a trial and error sort of issue. That being said, just because she knows she won't be digested, doesn't mean that she can't be crushed or suffocated inside of the giantess' body. Overall, even if they might survive it's still an incredibly unpleasant experience. This is especially true for Alexis, since she's accustomed to being on the giving end of this torture. She swallowed shrunken people to torment them, so she knows that being swallowed is and passing through Megan's body is going to be extremely unpleasant.
These things can be so clear in my mind while I'm writing, but they can get sort of lost in translation while being read. Hopefully this clears things up a bit moving forward!