[Report This]Date: March 02 2020 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 1 the beginning and Sydney
My feedback is basically the same. I like the premise of the curse. I like the action. Just slow a bit and expand on details!
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback and not being mean about it I really appreciate it! I will definitely do that for the other chapters this was sort of a test for it plus an introduction but the next chapters will be longer and I'll try to put more details in it I'm really glad you enjoy it though :) chapter 2 is up let me know what you think
Date: March 02 2020 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 1 the beginning and Sydney
Definitely pretty fast paced but I like this!! Maybe slow it down just a tad, but I do like this, it's a very interesting concept. Try to put a little more detail into what's going on. Try to aim for may e 1500 words a chapter? That is if you aren't doing as much story and just going for the action. This was really cool to read so far though, looking forward to more :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback and not being mean about it I really appreciate it! I will definitely do that for the other chapters this was sort of a test for it plus an introduction but the next chapters will be longer and I'll try to put more details in it I'm really glad you enjoy it though :) chapter 2 is up let me know what you think