I wonder what the men wanted from him...

You know, if you feel you want to include lots of thoughts of Jake, who I assume is the main character, like you have in italics, then maybe first person perspective is better.

Third person is pretty standard and we feel like we're being told the story, second person is good for making the reader feel more involved in the story but is the hardest, whereas first person ls more personal. I feel it might suit your story. So what you have is Jake's thoughts as he's running and out of breath then suddenly he meets these fine ladies and his emotion quickly changes.

Anyway I'm movin on to the next chapter because I'm liking the story so far.