Date: December 01 2020 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 4
A good interim chapter. Im looking forward to more vore, and dont be afraid to make the vore chapters longer. An average length for a well detailed vore chapter is about 3000 words, and us vore lovers will love you for that. If you need ideas on how to include more detail, good stories are "holly the freshmen", "full tour of frankie" and the weekend adventure, all of which are on this site.
Looking forward to more longer chapters. :)
Date: November 27 2020 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 3
So far a very good story. I wish the chapters were alittle longer and more descriptive, especially the vore. One of the best ways to approach that is to add more details on the environment and experience ie: "the stomach sloshed him around in the putrid, bubbling bog of mush. Some of the bilee got into his mouth, tasting like rotten, sour food." These kind of details help spice up the story.
And personal opinion: i hope he signs the divorce paper. Then you can do a yandere ex wife approch with him, and maybe he finds another woman in the meantime who is gentler, but willing to act out some of his fantasies that I have a feelong hes developing.
This would be a gun story development that keeps it dynamic and interesting.