Date: January 01 2018 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 1: my story
Need to proof read chapters for spelling errors, there quite a bit. Also I noticed spelling errors in the chapter titles, which is concerning. You've got a bright idea, you just need to take time to flesh it out more.
No rating, because you appear to be a novice (at the time of this story that is, I haven't read your other works)
[Report This]Date: August 05 2015 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 1: my story
Would prefer longer chapters.
[Report This]Date: July 03 2008 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 1: my story
Way short right now. Interesting stuff, but about 1/5 of an actual chapter. Don't give up or anything, but do try to develop a bit more before posting.
Date: July 02 2008 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1: my story
I recommend more detail and longer chapters. You're not on a time limit to write a story. Take your time to write a chapter. Use a word processing program to assist you. Your stories have potential if they're done right.
No rating as for now, because people like giving out 5 star ratings like candy.