I absolutely love the chemistry between the two main leads, as well as the subtle hints towards why certain characters act the way they do. You always seem to have a knack for good character dynamics, but this one is especially quite good imo. 

So, this is solely off the first chapter. But it seems like this is gearing up to be an enjoyable ride. My biggest liking to this so far is the lean and easy to follow nature of it. Though perhaps it does lack description at times.

I will say that grammar and punctuation wise I am seeing a bit too much commas in places where they sometimes don’t belong. Such as in the first 2 paragraphs. Not to mention formatting issues. Though they seem largely fixed by the next chapter (having skimmed it.) 

Another minor complaint I have is the use of brackets here. They seem to employ a tell not show situation to the story. (E.g Vee’s signature pose being “cool” is told to us, rather than anything describing it, or a metaphor likening it to something else or even inner monologue from the character telling us it’s her signature pose and that it’s cool. ) I feel like there are better ways to do these specific details which could leave your being more interesting. 

So far I have a few complaints, but it’s a good beginning.

Characterised as cruel, and our protagonist  definitely delivers on that title. The writing has improved from last chapter as well. But spelling errors are still present. Not much though. Overall, this was very nice.

Nice, I like the set up here for how Anna feels a bit uncomfortable about the ordeal, but ultimately does it anyway. 

I wonder why Beatrice called her a pervert though in chapter 1?

Haha, I’m loving this. The fact that our male lead and Anna can spend some more time together is great. Like actually interacting that is. 

Clover also is pretty interesting tbh. She seems like she’d make a good friend to any size enthusiast.

I’m really enjoying the dynamic they have here. It seems they’re hitting it off, which is why they’re spending so much time together. But it would be nice if we learned more about the two of them.

As always, the relationship is sailing on well. Anna being shy and embarrassed but into size stuff so much that she’d insert the apartment complex into herself for Our male leads reaction was gold. 

I don’t know what other size scenes of ideas you have planned, but I hope this story goes on for a while. It’s refreshing having a story where the main couple are just in love with each other, and there’s minimal drama. 

Seems like another story up my alley. And unlike another intergalactic space story you’ve done, it appears this one will be more focused and possibly more cruel. Both of those things I welcome (at least to a degree). I do think a bit more direction was needed in this chapter, provided as an introduction we, the readership, don’t know who’s who. But regardless, I’m excited for another one of your stories. 

Wow, the descriptions are very much so on point. Perhaps I find them a little bit too long at times personally, but objectively speaking, I think they’re near perfect in terms of quality. Characterisation of both our male and female lead is quite strong too. With descriptions about them giving us a general idea, and they’re actions directly showing us. Little to no spelling or grammar issues from what I can tell too.

There’s also a greater world at large and a threat that needs to be kept at bay. I’m interested to see how these specific plot lines will interact with our main characters. 

Overall, this seems like it’s going to be a great entry.

Amazing as per usual. I love a fantasy world, especially in this setting. The characters are about what I’d expect too, having their usual character traits. Although I’m not a huge fan of some of them, but that’s just my own personal opinion. Regardless, this is setting up to be another great one. My only criticism would be that, as it’s a fantasy world, a bit more detail would be nice around it.