Reviewer: Binoclarance Signed
Date: April 26 2022
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. A Pathetic Speck of Rock.
Really enjoyed the story so far!
Reading you critique your own writing made me chuckle as I have never been good at it failing that part of my English exam many years ago I couldn’t tell the difference between this and other stories on the site so I honestly couldn’t give you any feedback there.
I’m usually not a fan of fatal stuff or excess pain especially emotional unless the inflicter completely loved them and they could be resurrected not that I didn’t love Blyke being smashed by a huge ass. This feels like a perfect balance
Whilst like you said in a reply earlier this story is reaching its end and I really hope you either end up making a sequel or another entrance into the same universe or inspire others to write similar given its uniqueness as I’ve not seen any other stories to this scale with the kind of relationship Lena and Blyke have.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
And thanks for the high praise. I still have a lot to work on, things that became more glaringly obvious to me on what I should of done better in earlier chapters now, but I still think I did at least a decent job.
I did say it’s reaching towards its end, but that still means we will have a couple more chapters to go. Blyke and Lena need more time to each other imo and a bit more development for Lena is something I want to give. Who knows, if I’m up for it, I might continue past that or make a sequel. For now, a small break from finishing what was in the scope of this story is what im aiming for. Though I’ll probably leave it with some room for if I want to continue.
I definitely want to add a more action focused chapter for Lena and Blyke. And maybe some other stuff. I guess I have a lot of ideas, but again, would probably only do some of them in a sequel setting.