Well, finally got caught up with this again after letting my reading of it lapse.  Turns out I was about 3 months behind, but randomly re-read from Chapter 10 to remember what it was about.  Looking forward to this continuiing.

I think the change in perspective was nice too.  After all, the story was never really first person to begin with, so I don't see a need to stick to Ashley.  Also, focusing on Melody can give a much broader picture of the overall scene.  There's only just so much you can write about being stuck under someone's foot in my opinion, and Ashley has a fairly limited view of her surroundings.

I'm guessing this story is going to be a couple chapters beyond the originally planned 4, as we have  2 more girls plus whatever the conclusion is to get through, and I think having each girl's session in it's own chapter breaks things up nicely. It doesn't really matter if they are short or not, it's still a good read.

I don't really get why most people are uptight about this whole punishment thing being uncalled for.  30 minutes is nothing compared to up to 2 hours for 52 weeks, and being kept in a tank for that whole time.  As we sort of know the ending already, it will keep her out of future trouble, and they do anything particularly (physically) harmful to her.  As for emotional, I'm of the opinion she won't hold it against the Omega girls forever, but that the lesson will stick with her for the rest of her life.  It seems to be having a lasting effect and perhaps as much or more of an impact on Melody as it does Ashley as well.

Just looked at the Size Roles and Growth tags, and it does seem predetermined that Sarah will grow.  Is this up for change or debate depending on how we vote?

Just as a suggestion: Having just the option may get rather confusing down the line.  I'd recommend if not chapter names at least something like Chapter 2: Option B

Looks like this may be an interesting story.  I do have an opinion on the rating though.  At minimum, I'd say this was PG, even at chapter 2, but judging from the summary, I'd expect this to reach an R before it's finished.  Very few stories are legitimately G on a site like this.

The chapter numbering I think causes some needless confusion. I would just renumber them in order, and rename that chapter to what it's about.  The explanation at the beginning is enough to know you had some more stuff written, but it didn't flow well and so you didn't post it, we don't really need the chapter outline to do that.

I really hope you decide to write more in this story sometime too.  Your way of indicating who is speaking is a bit unusual, but I got used to it quickly, and didn't have any trouble following along. Iria sounds like she's a fun person to deal with.

Very interesting story so far.  I seemed to be folllowing along ok, but would it help at all to be familiar with Frozen first?