Reviewer: versusterminus7 Signed
Date: August 05 2016
Title: Chapter 7: Me, A Model?
Very happy to see this chapter fully edited and posted- excellent stuff. Again, Caitlin does have a point- Jessica is not exactly in a position to argue- not when she consumes so much more resources that others. Still- modeling would beat out the other suggestions we discussed via email (though, it would be kinda hot to see Jessica let loose and plow through a condemned building for demolition). Lastly, there's something very captivating about this chapter- it's a rising action, it feels like all the build up prior to this is coming to a logical conclusion. I hope Jessica continues to learn more about herself and her abilities- and if she decides to do modeling, I think she'll be great at it. Also, super cute the way Jack carried on about Jessica. :)
Author's Response:
I hadn't noticed it until you pointed it out but what I've released so far has built up into this moment, an entire arc of the story. After this, it would be something else entirely as she jumps into all this. I would not mind seeing Jessica use building demolition as a way of venting, punching entire blocks down because she needs to release that stress in a healthy way.
Thanks for the review and all the help you've given so far!