A fairy is captured by a deranged girl and shown the crueler side of humanity.
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This was such a great story when it first came out, though what happended To the other 4 or so chapters?! Could you reupload or give me a link To read the missing chapters? Anything will do, i really wanted to read this story in full.
A young man must come to terms with the fact that he no longer enjoys the station in life that was his by birthright and must now adjust to the cruel fate that life has dealt him.
Amazing story so far... That is if you haven't forget that this story exists. Will you continue the story?
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Perhaps one day I will.. The next few chapters I really have to think about before I structure them. But I might get back to this one sooner rather than later Clouder. :)
Thank you for your interest in this story that has been on hiatus lately. :)
It is so great to see this story updated with a nee chapter! I gotta say it is amazing and really well thought out. The way the main characters interact with each other is realistic and when they approach the daughter of the house, you beautifully described her as this big massive giant to the little people that is dangerous and but playful as well!
The interaction of the brother and sister is cute and playful. But she also shows who is boss and dominance to her older brother as, she toys with him without effort and treating him like a toy.
The best part that I enjoyed was the mouthplay part, the way she just slams her head down to get her brother in her mouth, is really effective. It shows that she was quick to act and that the brother had such small time to react in to do anything and it seems to imply that like she loved having him in her mouth and that she just quickly wasted no time getting him in her mouth.
The way she swifty lifted her head up shows elegance and also I bet content that she has got this opportunity to play with her brother in her mouth. But the very best of all in my opinion. Is how you described her she dominantly and child like she slurped him In.
The way that you describe that his feet were the only thing to be seen and that they were violently thrashing around, really shows that, she enjoys this and the best in my opinion is how you described how she slurped him in like a child nosiely and wet. Really good image play, It was excellent and really easy and fun to visualise :)
From this point onwards, I like how the 2 little ones don't seem to pay much borther, which is like the idea of, if you don't keep up we aren't going to help you. And in this chapter, they don't bother considering to help. Since the cage can be seen as a metaphor as their imprisonment for acting aganist their actions of helping out.
It is also a nice detail, we can assume that the sister enjoys playing with him, maybe with dolls and treating like a baby or a doll lol or in this specific chapter, nothing more than a mouth toy ;D
Overall it was an excellent piece of writing. You should consider adding the brother and sister in more situations like more mouthplay, but also maybe like her playing dolls with him like he is one, or treating him like a baby. You should also consider maybe her dangling him to her mouth and maybe she opens it for a moment and then closes it again to continue playing with him and all of a sudden her mother's comes in, which she stops and tries to hide him in her mouth, she doesn't talk very much and slurs her words. So the mother would find it obvious that she has her brother in her mouth and could say like " oh not again. Spit him out right now!" And she would cup her hands around her mouth and slowly spit him out with a lot of salvia.
Maybe you can consider the mother doing mouthplay?
Take care and I can't wait for the next chapter :D
Thank you for the extensive review Clouder....
These main characters are moving on now but don't count this family or some of it's members out of the mix.
I like that you seem to appreciate the pains that I'm going to, to make sure that the reader knows exactly what is going on as clearly evidenced in this review.
Please hang in there for the next few chapters now.. I've figured out a strategy to keep it out of a GTS drought, and will switch up writing styles just a tad in order to keep this interesting on all levels...
And thank you most of all for being the primary voice that talked me into continuing this story once again Clouder!
What if Gulliver's Travels was a real account and not fiction? This is my idea of what would have naturally unfolding had the British gone knocking on the wrong doors. This world also went technologically into the direction of SteamPunk with Tesla Coils, Difference Engines (rather than computers), Gears, and propulsion systems driven by Steam rather than oil like our current one.
Great story as usual! I read all of your last ones and they were awesome!
I hope you still will update the sitter story, I am dying to find out what happened to the little guy :(
Well rest asured that Sitter for the Summer is not dead. I simply burnt myself out on it a while back. What was it about Sitter that you liked so much? Why was it different from my other stories? If you can answer that one then perhaps my gears on it will begin moving again. The next chapters were going to have little GTS interaction in order to set up the rest of the story.. Do you feel the story could have survived that drought? This was and still is a concern of mine to this day.
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