Reviewer: Frosty1979 Signed
Date: February 23 2015
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great story so far. I really like it when Women dominate men by using their natural bodily scents and tastes. I also like that the mother is still a bit conflicted about using him in all these dirty ways. Creates some suspension when she will finally not be able anymore to hold back.;P
Hope that it will gradually get more extreme though and not jump to the most extreme stuff immediately. Makes it somewhat more believable in my view.
Maybe let him get used to the smell and taste of her sweaty feet more first... let him maybe even lick clean her sweaty armpits (because she has forgot her deo and she claims its an emergency.;) ).
Oh and I like that he is not that unwilling. Meaning he gets turned on by this treatment. Imo that makes the story also more "real" in that sense that it helps the mother (and sister maybe) to overcome their limits since they just use him like he likes it anyway. :)
Another idea could be to introduce other females. Maybe e.g. a female psychiatrist the mother attends after using him as living dildo for the first time. Instead of getting her out of it she could strengthen her in her desires... and might even use him too (so she can properly judge how the mother must feel like. ;P )
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback and suggestions! I'm trying to walk the line between it being semi-consensual, in that Luke is being taken advantage of but undeniably is enjoying it despite his reservations. It's a bit tricky to find the right balance sometimes. Chapter 4 is being worked on now and I hope to have it out relatively soon.