Reviewer: babajo3 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2018 7:08 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...

So... Wow, I have to say, just wow. I read this entire story up until this point in a single day because I really didn't want to put it down, very very good job. I honestly almost forgot it wasn't an actual writing submission instead of something posted on this website, so spectacular job in that. I actually was so floored by the quality I'm going to give it a more "actual" review instead of what I'd normally give to stores on this website, because this legit deserves it.

So first off, let me just say it, this story had legitemently one of the best character development of anything I've seen on this website, and honestly better than most things I've seen online regardless of their aim, which for a "giantess" focused story is exceptional, bravo. The time and focus you've taken on each character and the world building you have done is exceptional, and is the main reason this story has stuck out to me as much as it has. A lot of the time I was reading chapters and the fact that Abby was shrunken seemed like more a necessary plot point than anything else, which is impressive as normally that part of the story is kinda forced.

Another thing this story did extremely well is it didn't just force the giantess interaction down your throat, and take every single situation it could have to be fetish heavy and distract the story itself. It took itself seriously, and what elements there were of that fit into the overall world you had built. Sure, it seemed semi-forced when it first showed up, but accepting the world build as it was, it wasn't an unnecessary action which worked a lot better than most things this site features.

One thing I think the story kinda limits itself in oddly is the monster girls nature itself. Its kinda... odd, but I think early on the differences between the girls and "normal" humans was highlighted more, and they seemed more otherworldly, but until recently with Yu, it seemed like they were kinda... almost humanized too much in a way. I don't know exactly how to say it, but like with Casey, the fact that she is a dullahan was only really important in her backstory and early on, he "nature" as a monster girl really sort of got lost in a way later in the story. I kinda get that its because Abby is viewing them more like just regular "people" instead of monsters, which is part of the development in the story, but viewpoints aside they are actually different. Its not a bad thing, something I just noticed as I read the story. The quality picked up through the story it seemed, but in some ways the girls themselves were more humanized as time went on as well.

Overall though, easily my most enjoyed read on this website, and look forward for more updates in the future, really enjoying the direction of the story and can't wait to see how it develops in the future! Great job :)

Author's Response:

I'm floored... This review honestly raised my spirits more then I can express to you right now.  Especially considering the day I've had today. Thank you, honestly, thank you for taking the time to write all of this. It's insightful, fair, and points out area's that I can contemplate more. I'm glad you like my story Babajo, but in all honesty, a lot of the credit has to be shared with Franchise Writer. Quite a few of the things you're mentioning he's helped me with, one that comes to mind right away being that just because the story is Giantess oriented doesn't mean it has to be only about Giantess'.

I just wanted to say that it isn't all me. xD, But I'm really happy you've been as engrossed as you are up until this point. One thing I would like to clarify if it helps is that the humanization of the characters is meant by design. This story is meant to be read through the eyes of Abby and as time goes on I wanted to express how her views on their natures and personalities seem less foreign, and more natural because she understands them more now, hence her curiosity and urgency she exhibits to try and help the girls whenever she can. She has a want to help me, a need even. And I wanted to focus that subtly as the story went on. I do however see what you're getting at. I tried to keep the personalities of the girl's traits specific to their nature's as well. Amy's Crow like tendencies, Poppy's love of drinking and spender, and even the Twin's licentious personalities, bordering on playful and downright obscene at times. 

I suppose I could try to make them more noticeable, but I'm trying to reel it back little by little because, as I've said, this story is shown through Abby's eyes and it's her way of grasping these girls on how she views them. Starting with Kari being some kind of diabolic witch cursing her, to a ferocious Neko trying to eat her, and then on to A bloodthirsty Dragon like the ones she heard stories about. One thing I want to point out though is with Casey, she doesn't have just one nature but two. The one you see her more often is the gruffer one with her head on. When it's off, I try to orient it as a much different personality bordering on a different person entirely. This, however, is less noticeable considering how Casey now views Abby compared to the first time she took off her head in front of her. Perhaps, I'll have to do more focus on the two though as I'm trying to do with the others. I tried to do that with each of the girls, but Casey specifically was a challenge because her role in the story changed about 12 or so chapters in. Hopefully, that clarifies it a little. I'll try to adjust the girls a bit more so they don't seem simply Human. That was never my intention for any of them. Well, all but one of them I should say, but, no spoilers~.

I'll definitely look into their natures more though. I guess somewhere along the lines, personalities, and natures mixed too far...

Either way, I hope you stay with me until the end. We're not there yet and I don't plan on stopping till the final curtain falls. Even if this is just a story on a site like this, it means a lot more to me then just some smut fic. And that's the purpose of my stories. I want them to have meaning to the people who read them giving them the respect they deserve.

Thanks again for the wonderful review, it's given me some inspiration to continue writing more today. And it made my emotions a lot better then they were. :3

 

 

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12 2018 1:17 AM Title: Alone in the Dark?

Hi hi ^^

Yu is pure love! I fear she will make it more difficult for me to choose a favorite now since I was already having enough trouble. I liked doppels a lot already but this girl was just totally adorable.

Though, lots of mystery surrounds her. I can't conclude too much from the current chapter but it does seem like a really tragic past. Also, I wonder why she's helping Abby. Maybe she looks like her previous mate or something similar? Or maybe she's allied with Eve in some way. I suppose it should be really important since she's going through a lot for the tiny. Did she have some plan in case Abby didn't allow her to get her energy...? It's also uncertain for me if the other girls know about her.

Also, very interesting and mysterious way for her to collect energy. I wonder if Yu was just with her eyes closed or maybe took a different form...? Also from I can gather I think she vored Abby in some way to extract even her saliva or something similar to that.

On that note, is she really healed? I hope she's not just transforming and fooling Abby into believing she is indeed alright now...

Anyway, interesting chapter. Really does makes me want to know more about Yu in different ways. Though I also wonder what's going on on Ebon's side.. Whichever you're doing next, I'm sure it'll be interesting too.

As for the secrets, I don't know. Feels a bit frustrating not being able to guess some stuff in a bit. Though, if related to the imgur, maybe "..."? You might understand if so.

See ya~

Author's Response:

I'm surprised you asked that. Why she's helping her. Attention to detail always warrants my appreciation. :3

As for why though that will be shown as the chapters go on. Don't worry though, Yu still has time on her hands. And as for her hands, don't worry either. They're healed. Also, her plan never included taking essence from Abby, to begin with so if you think that's why she was helping her, think again. :P 

In regards to her intimate moment with Abby, that's all in the mind's eye. I wanted to make it questionable to the readers meaning, she could have swallowed her, could have inserted her, or perhaps even of drowned her. There is no definite answer for what she did and not even Abby knows herself... But, I know~ ;)

And lastly, as for Ebon, don't expect her to show up anytime soon. Angering a Vampire is a fatal mistake...

 

For this, I'll leave for now. Thank you for the in-depth review as always Kenta, they're always so wonderful to read. :) 

 

But, I will say this, considering only you seemed to catch it... As for my secret, I put into this post, you're on the right track.

...

 

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2018 1:24 AM Title: The Cycle Continues...

The weekend is here and that means free time!

Cute act between the twins, Casey and Abby. Nice to have more background about Amy, I wonder when we'll get to hear what happened that night since that info seems quite limited. Also, who would have thought that Amy wasn't on the dumb side and actually was pretty intelligent for her species standard lol.

I didn't expect Ebon here at all, to be honest. It was a nice action scene, is pretty cool that Casey now was more useful when facing off the dragon, hopefully, she's not too hurt... Same with the twins, they had quite nice moments to shine on this one. Though, Ebon keeps showing she's a beast. Hope Emma gets better soon...

Now, I wonder if Eve knows Abby is safe. Ebon's health might depend on that. Also, what measures will take the vampire about Ebon. The option to kill her is there of course and she should be really mad right now but she knows that would upset her little Abby. Maybe she'll hurt her to a point she can move? Shrinking her doesn't really seem to be an option but I have to say it would be funny to have a tiny Ebon, maybe being captive by Poppy.

About the next girl, I'm unsure about her species but her powers seem pretty cool. I feel a bit frustrated that I forgot about her previous appearance in chapter 8... For the one in chapter 13, I have to agree that it might be when Abby was saved from the flames. I wouldn't have noticed if I didn't read your comments though. Eager to see what happens to her.

Also, very cute how Casey kept calling Abby her storeen.

See ya~

Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed it Kenta :D

Sorry for not replying until now. I got caught up in my next chapter and with school. :(

I was wondering if anyone ever noticed her hands in this but it didn't look like it so I wanted others to have a little hint. I plan on the next chapter coming out soon enough so I hope your patient and will enjoy.

Also, don't worry too much about Ebon. More will be explained later~

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2018 12:20 PM Title: The Cycle Continues...

That was a good chapter. We got a really nice moment with Casey, Emma, and Ella at the the start. It's nice to know ho wmuch all of them care abut Abby. The relationships between all of them have really grown.

But when Ebon shows up, oh boy. I hope Casey is ok after we didn't see the outcome of the fight. And I was seriously worried that Ebon might end up killing one of the imps. I sure hope they're both alright.

But I really have no clue who this new girl might be, or when her previous cameos were. She save Abby just in the knick of time though. I'm guessing this new girl must know Eve in some way, but their response saving Abby was too coordinated for them to not be working together it seems.

But Ebon is in real trouble now, boy. Eve is angry, really angry. I do hope she doesn't kill her though. I was hoping that they might be able to get her see the lght at some point, and that she could eventually learned to live with Abby as well.

 

I'm always  excited when I see updates for this story. No matter how long it takes to put chapters out, keep it up!

Author's Response:

Does she know Eve? Hmm, possibly~

Or, maybe she just has impeccable timing~

You'll have to wait and see! >:3

I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter Foreignkanto, I wanted to show more of the growing relationships that Abby has with each of the girls and even with the girls who once hated each other. There's an effect of sorts I'm trying to relay and I'm glad you caught onto it. 

And I wouldn't worry about Ebon. I have plans for her. Big, plans.

Thank you so much for the review, it honestly makes my day and fuels my thoughts and words to keep writing for everyone. :)

Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09 2018 12:48 PM Title: Face, Faith, and Feathers!

I'm liking Abby more and more. The way she's taking control of most of the girls like a loving older sister is nice. Casey tsundere moment was funny, too. It's interesting how Amary or "Amy" called Ebon of all Hominals "nice face." This was also a relaxing chapter. You usually end chapters with some cliffhanger that has us thinking, "he loves torturing us, doesn't he?" 

 

Btw, have you checked out Johnrussi's Puberty story? He's a new and might I add, exceptionally good writer on this site whose story focuses on a loli giantess. Someone even mentioned your story, Precious Little Demons in one of his reviews. I recommend it plus, he's a really nice guy.

 

Keep up the awesome work as always, guys :)

Author's Response:

I do take pleasure in my cliffhangers, but, that wouldn't fit for this chapter. I'm glad you liked it Nothingness. I plan to expand on the next chapter for Amy don't you worry.

Also no I've never read the story Puberty yet, but know that I know a little bit about it I'll give it a read, thanks. :)

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22 2018 9:43 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,

I love the caring nature of Eve in this chapter as she reads Abby's mind and shows concern for her wellbeing. You do an excellent job of portraying it.

I too so badly wanted Abby to become Eve's mate, and the interruptions were frustrating. I suppose mating would close off a major plot thread and thus it's delay has value in drawing out the story, but it's still frustrating.

I like how we're out of the flashback zone. While I loved the writing in the flashbacks, the technique in general is not my favorite. I find myself wanting to get back to the main timeline. Now that we're back, looking forward to seeing what happens next!

Author's Response: I’m glad you understand the necessity or delaying the mating factor. It holds a very significant role in the story I assure you and I can’t reveal nor explain how yet sadly. Either way, I’m glad you’re still enjoying my chapters none the less and I appreciate your input as always SpookyTaco. :3

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: January 14 2018 2:44 AM Title: Paving a way for their future,

Hey, it's been a while! Finally, I got some things sorted out with my schedule and have more time to review now. I Felt bad for not being able to comment the previous chapter before the current one...

26:
Knowing the methods that Najia used for getting info is a nice extra, one could already guess that she was more of a pacifist but she seems to totally stick to it now. I wonder for what reason she chose to go down that path. Or maybe is just some differences between her birth country and the current one?

Eve went through a difficult choice, I'm glad in the end she went for what she believed to be right and got to stay but Najia side. Is also great that the Kitsune got to know at least a few Eve's feelings towards her before she got to her current comatose state, it would've been rather sad otherwise.

I don't know what to think about Eve's parents naming sense. Either they're rather wicked or that's just their way to deal with their loss and/or honor Eve's "memory". It was also a nice detail that the vampiress could recognize Caitriona faster than her biological mother. And I'm happy that the maid got to see her heiress is still alive. I don't know how she'll feel about Eve since their final encounter before the incident wasn't exactly the best but, if anyone needs to know that she's still "alive", I'm glad it was her.

And also, is nice nothing worse happened to Brook ;_;

27:
There's a big change for Eve in this one. Seeing her all giggly was great, even somehow alluring, maybe because of the gap with her more stern behavior? Anyway, it gave the feeling that she got a big weight out of her back after telling Abby about her past.

The letters were a really cute detail, in a lot of senses! It was also clever to leave them to explain some of Eve's feelings and the transition she went through in her mindset about Abby. Wonder when will be a good time to send it.

And, there goes the chance for a harem ending I guess? I'm unsure now about who will mate with Abby. Rather, I'm unsure about who I want to mate with Abby, all of them are so cute ;_; Anyway, Eve took the rejection quite good for now. It was too sudden for Abby indeed. But is good that she isn't giving out!

For the final, it really was a demonstration of that alluringness I mentioned before. I'm sure this rocked around Abby's mindset in a lot of ways, especially knowing those are her actual feelings. She'll have some thinking to do after all of this. Also, Eve sure knows how to take advantage, being the first one to prioritize completely Abby's pleasure.

Excellent job overall you two, I will be looking forward to the next one as always. Will try to comment faster for that one.

See ya~

Author's Response:

Don't feel bad D:

Was hoping you were alright.

I'm glad you still enjoy the story and the chapters coming out. :)

I was worried about how my last chapter would pan out but I'm getting positive feedback so that's a plus. Also, I won't say anything in regards to Abby's relationships. You'll just have to patiently wait and find out. :P

Thank you for the review Kenta, I missed you! :3

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06 2018 11:24 PM Title: Paving a way for their future,

I loved this chapter and the return to Abby and Eve together. Now that Abby knows Eve’s story, there’s a lot more understanding between the two of them. I’m also glad that Abby didn’t immediately accept being her mate. It gives a bit more gravity to the decision.

The one thing that felt off to me was that it seem like Eve was being more precise with her gang than should be possible given their suze difference. At Anny’s size, it seems like it would be impossible for Eve’s fang to pierce the skin of Abby’s check with piercing the entire cheek and going into the mouth.

But putting that aside, I loved it. I loved how Eve was able to do exactly what she needed to to nring Abby to orgasm. And I loved her teasing. Not giving her release until she said she wanted it was a fun little intimate thing to help on the road to Abby’s acceptance. But the most fun thing was how Eve was describing what Abby’s life would be like once she’s given responsibility to provide essense for all the girls in the cave. It’s going to be very erotic lol.

I look forward to seeing more physical sand emotional intimacy between Abby and Eve in the future. Hoping for some action with Abby getting to interact with Eve’s private parts. Anyway, keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts foreignkanto :D I’m glad you’ve given me some input on how it played out, it really does help. :3 As for Eve piercing Abby’s cheek, I meant it more as she broke her skin a bit like a slight scratch, not an actual wound. I’m sorry if that didn’t rely properly. I’ve never tried a scene like this before until now. I’m hoping it was still a great scene to read none the less. As for Abby getting a bit *closer* to Eve, don’t worry, I have something in mind already. ;3

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: December 04 2017 12:58 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 3

Work kept me away from this longer than expected, but finally I could read it!

It was really sad to see Eve denying she's not human anymore. The method to test it was effective sure, but really harsh. I suppose it was the only way to make it clear to her, I guess...

The naga attack, wow, seems like the tales about Najia weren't exaggerations. Good thing, since Eve was very close on that one. I wonder if that's when Eve started changing her mindset about the kitsune or maybe it was a thing coming forward since she was found by her?

Anyway, time keeps passing. Najia and Eve had a nice and fun relationship until more people got in the picture. I hope Najia picked up Eve's true feelings... Or even if she didn't right there, hope she got to know how she actually feels about her before she got to her current state. And well, I guess Eve was always the jealous kind.

Ebon's apparition but I don't think there're many clues about her past in there, or at least I didn't really notice them. Impressive she was able to fight Eve though. I remember the vampire mentioned that about their first encounter but being it after part of Najia's training does say a lot about it. Also, wonder if she also trained the others.

Feel uneasy about what is to come, since Eve said it was the thing she regrets the most. We've seen Brook is safe already so things couldn't have ended up totally bad, hopefully... Looking forward to the conclusion!

See ya~

Author's Response:

Thanks, Kenta, I really appreciate your review. Things will be finished up soon with Eve's past but once they're done, I expect everyone to see her in a new light. Either way, plans are on the way, but, production for the next chapter might take awhile. Hopefully, I'll have something to show everyone since I got back over to the US. :D

Either way, thanks again and don't worry about not reviewing for a while. Better late than never. it shows you still care about my story after all this time. :3

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31 2017 11:52 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2

I've been wanting to read the chapter since it was uploaded but it was a really tough week ;_;

Have to say, I didn't really feel much for Caitriona in the previous chapter so I didn't expect to feel so bad for her now. The poor lady might've been Eve's biggest ally and got it really bad. It was so satisfying to see her trying to get her master to see Eve, yet it was so sad... At least she's safe, I suppose. By the way, I have a bit of trouble picturing her, I wonder how old she's supposed to be.

As for Ventris, seeing him acting so shaken... The who guy stood up to a vampire with almost total composure was acting nervous. That gets to show how much he actually felt for her daughter, and that the fear and hate towards vampires took priority, making killing her the only viable option. At least that's what I want to think, that even if she was an heiress for the most part, some love as there. It could've been the frustration of losing his heiress but, that's even sadder...  I wonder if he was looking for any other alternatives all this time or just stalling the inevitable...

Is really a world without any intention of communication within species. Seeing Eve's wonderful recuperation, it makes you wonder how much more could be done if all species worked together. I also think of how much everything could've changed if the vampire had managed to take Eve under his wings.

And of course, Eveline is the one that had it the worst. Left in the dark about her current condition. Gradually being separated from other human's contact. Every day being treated more like a best instead of a human. And finally being betrayed by her own family... Man, why did it have to be so sad ;_; And depending on how much Naija knew about vampires, the poor girl might have had to learn the down of her conditions by painful tray an error, just as when trying to enter that building in this chapter.

And seeing Naija in action is nice, she strikes as someone with a big heart from the start. Also, must feel nice to be embraced by a fluffy tail.

As some other have pointed, I was curious about Eve's past length. It's been great of course but having these much screen time feels as if she's on a protagonist level higher than the other girls. Not that there's anything wrong with that if that's the aim. N-not that I'm saying I want some more insight on Casey or anything...

Excellent chapter.

See ya.

Author's Response:

*Smirks*

 

So you think I'm done with the other girls, even if they've already been shown? Think again! >:3

There will be more to come, don't you worry. I suppose the reason for so much focus on Eve is because F.W put her whole world together before creating her character. I'm pretty sure I did that backwards... I will be showing more on the others as time goes on don't worry. But, I think this needs to happen regardless. It gives a good context into how Najia comes into play. I didn't plan on revealing that till the end, but I think this is definitely needed. 

I'll be back in a couple weeks time so I can take over if he can't finish the next chapter. He doesn't know when he's going to start it at least. I'm glad you're enjoying the chapters, and I'm glad that you're still reviewing them too. :)