Date: August 19 2008 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
I liked the story. You did everything that you needed to for a short tale of this type.
I'm looking forward to your future work.
Author's Response: thank you for your kind comments. i hope you enjoy my future work. I think I've found a good place to write my vore stories.
Date: August 19 2008 2:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
Okay, not bad, not bad at all. As an American, I found it hard to place evey dish, though thanks to an anime, I know what Mochi looks like(Monster Rancher). The plot is good, and the characters come off well. I do enjoy the last few scenes too, especially the description of the contents of the stomach sloshing about. All in all, an A.
thanks for your kind comments!