Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13 2016 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 1

You can definitely use more pronouns, especially in chapter 1. Instead of 'Jason', use 'he'. You described the action scenes well, though I felt there should have been some dialog in the first chapter. Surely some words would have been spoken with so many people in a small box. As for the ending of chapter 2, here's to hoping Jason escapes and finds the giantess of his dreams. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks a bunch for the review! I'll make the substutions for the pronouns as you suggested when I post the next chapter, which I'll begin work on soon. I'll also take a look at adding some dialogue between the micros. 

You'll see what'll become of Jason with a few days (school permitting). I'm debating keeping it at 3 chapters or spiltting it into four.