Great stuff, seems like a good continuation of where chapter 1 left off. Although I do wonder where the story will go from here, as in if they’re be some grand adventure or plot line to be followed. 

Author's Response:

It's a sort of play on DnD campaigns, so yeah there is a grander plot in store

Well, I’m currently up to date on this story: it’s fairly standard stuff, but that’s a given considering how it’s a spin on a fairly ordinary premise. What matters most is how it’s executed well. The writing prose is simple and easy to read, perhaps description here and there could be improved, but even if it wasn’t it’s still to a decent standard.  The contents of what’s written so far also bare no reason for strong criticisms, it’s all fairly good. I’d say keep doing what your doing. 

However, you did ask for feedback. So I’ll list a minor nitpick of mine. Being that there isn’t much being covered per a chapter. A few hundred more words would be nice, simply due to chapter 1 and 3 ending in a manner that is fairly lack lustre. Nothing wrong with that, but it’s far more exciting to read the next chapter when the prior one leaves you anticipating more. I personally think 100-200 extra words could resolve this nitpick. 

Overall, this story is promising. But there isn’t much to review yet. I’ll probably come back when there’s more. And at this pace, I’m sure many more people will want to too.

Great introduction chapter. The third person use of narrative worked really well with the contents of this chapter, and a good amount of description was used too. 

We also got some general characterisation for some of the main few characters that were prominent here, with Henry being somewhat kindhearted, maybe a bit ignorant, and the sea beast woman being capable of understanding actions from Henry also show her understanding of social dynamics and intentions. 

Good stuff.

Now that I’m a few chapters in, I’ll give this a proper star rating. 

Overall it was very enjoyable so far, and this new chapter does add some new opportunity for more drama between our 3 characters.

The juxtaposition between the tones of the divine chapter and the mortal chapter were exactly as I hoped for. The sense of playfulness and fun in the earlier chapter perfectly contrasts and compliments the sense of terror and destruction in this one. Of course , using so many perspectives are a must for these kinds of things, as it were done here. But sometimes, (and I do think I’m nitpicking here.) it can feel like a compilation of random bad events when it’s just given in this order so frequently. 

Other than that, this seems like it’s heading in a good direction.

Chapter 2 is here. And I have to say it’s conveyed that sense of scale very nicely. I think the writing prose has even improved too. Chapter is a bit towards the shorter side, but for what’s written, it definitely does well.

Gentle story with a nice build up of romance, before it pays off near the end. It’s a self contained narrative that ties itself well in a satisfying manner by its conclusion. The writing is descriptive enough to paint the picture, but leaves enough to allow the reader to envision the scene to themselves. Personally I prefer having more details during fetish content, but I can see that those raunchy scenes weren’t  quite the focus. The romance aspect was, and that was delivered quite well.    

I would have liked a bit more description at the start however. Overall though, I really liked it.

Wow great stuff! 

I’ve always thought about combining game mechanics and the classic giantess growth scenario to see where it goes, and this a very nice story of it. It’s all really well written too. 

Amazing levels of description. Always great to see for any story that wants to go in more depth to its world building. I don’t have any complaints, my only subjective nitpick is that a mix of some smaller paragraphs added in would be good too. Helps make the writing stand out more. But that’s just me. I’m excited to see where this goes!

It’s been a while since I’ve last read one of your stories, and I have to say I definitely picked a good one to read. This is amazing! 

The slime woman concept along with giantess is really fun, and opens up a lot of tags/fetish content that usually isn’t as accessible in the size fetish. I’m really loving the way this turned out and how the two lovers progressed.

Though, it’s slightly rough seeing Susan force herself on the male lead a bit, but to her it’s also necessary for her survival. Not to mention no one said anything that a relationship with a slime was gonna follow human ethics down to a tee either.  

Overall it’s all fun size fetish stuff in the end, I loved every bit of this story. I understand it’s a one shot, but in all honesty, if you ever expanded on the concept more in a larger story, I would love to read it!