Penname: Frizzle [Contact] Real name:
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Summary:

Working on the summary...


Categories: Gentle
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2197 Read Count: 18272
[Report This] Published: March 10 2007 Updated: March 10 2007
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed star
Date: December 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: A Dream Come true

I gotta be completely honest, I was about to read the story until I immediately realized the block of text was straining my eyes...

You need to create paragraphs, and learn to improve your punctuation/grammar

I recommend tuning up this story a bit, and I'll check back in a week or so. If it's fixed, great and I'd love to read the story and change my rating, but as of right now I can't even get past the first couple sentences, it's just to straining on my eyes :(

 

Summary: Julia pays revenge on his boss for humiliating her
Categories: Humiliation, Entrapment, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1993 Read Count: 8283
[Report This] Published: March 12 2007 Updated: March 12 2007
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Revenge is best served 'Shrunk'

The paragraphs are a wonderful improvement I see! Alot of the beginning I felt was pointless, and I'll admit I found myself skipping over stuff that seemed irrelevant to the story. 

You have the paragraphs nailed, and now you just need to work on your grammar and vocabulary. If you can improve those skills, you will no doubt be one of the better authors on this site in my opinion!

The cat scene was very hot. I'm not a fan of animal vore per say, but for some reason I have a soft spot for crow and cat vore. The thought of Julia feeding the Dr. to her cat as punishment was extremely hot, and I honestly wished you had gone into more detail with it :/

I'll admit, the scene was so great, but so anticlimactic as it passed within seconds of reading... and that's another area you need to work on. Details, give us more details in the actions of the characters. Show us what is happening to them in detail, and show us how they feel when said actions are taking place!

 

Anywho, much better story than the previous one I read of yours! I'm upping my rating to four stars only because I see an incredible improvement. This also means however, that I'll now hold you to a higher standard ;)

 

Keep writing! I enjoy your works :)

Kerry, My Owner by rodent Rated: R starhalf-star [Reviews - 6]
Summary: I am shrunk down to 3 inches tall and used as a pet for Kerry
Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Insertion
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 750 Read Count: 23799
[Report This] Published: July 02 2008 Updated: July 02 2008
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: my story

Need to proof read chapters for spelling errors, there quite a bit. Also I noticed spelling errors in the chapter titles, which is concerning. You've got a bright idea, you just need to take time to flesh it out more.

No rating, because you appear to be a novice (at the time of this story that is, I haven't read your other works)

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstar
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2:tbreakfast

Gonna be honest, I didn't read far. 

#1 - It's as if you are purposefully writing as short of a chapter as possible.. I've rarely seen chapters this short. Take. Your. Time.

#2 - <i>god she must be at least 50 feet tall</i> <---- I noticed this as I was reading, and it was quite silly.... it's almost as if you didn't... wait for it... 'proof' read your chapter. I made this mistake during the entire course of my very first story, in which I never proof read my chapters. My story still turned out great, thank god.... but it could have been better if I took my time to proof read before posting. Always. Proof. Read.

#3 - Don't be discouraged. It's very easy to be discouraged when getting critical reviews, trust me I know. Every review, even the most minute critique, and drastically alter your decisions when writing, or even destroy your will to write at all. Don't let that happen. Take your idea, mold it, shape it, and let it evolve until it's perfect. We all have great imaginations, you just need to learn your own personal technique in which to express it on paper (metaphorically speaking of course)

Do you have gmail? I suggest creating a google mail account and using their google drive. It's almost iconically similar to microsoft word, only it's free. You get 15gb of storage (for writing that's basically infinite storage) and it comes with spell check, and grammar check (very useful). It could be a powerful tool to help you solve the spelling issues you are having. 

Another great tool is dictionary.com and thesaurus.com! I always have those two sites up whenever I'm writing, that way I can learn new vocabulary and look up new words that I need to properly use or describe something in my story. This could drastically improve your writing.

 

I hope you don't discontinue this story, it has an interesting premise! Hope you continue it :D

Elizabeth by Black Neptune Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Derrick has a fling going on behind his sister's back with her longtime friend Elizabeth. After having a dream in which he is shrunken and killed by her, he goes on to meet her for yet another sexual encounter. However, prophetic dreams do exist...


Categories: Butt, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: Gruesome Shorts (GTS)
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5737 Read Count: 11600
[Report This] Published: July 06 2012 Updated: July 06 2012
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 16 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Elizabeth

Sucks that this story never took off. It wasn't half bad :/

Summary:

Apologies, but I've had to remove this as per Amazon's terms of service. 



Categories: Butt, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Insertion, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 27 Read Count: 26470
[Report This] Published: January 13 2014 Updated: July 09 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 09 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Removed

Im enjoying this story. I hope you continue it.



Author's Response:

I for the life of me, cannot understand why people enjoy this story.

Ridiculous Smut is apparently a market. :D

Summary:

Holly is a two-inch tall 19 year old attempting her first year at college. Along the way she'll have to learn how to handle her ravenous roommate and the struggles of being surrounded by new people.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Body Exploration, Entrapment, Gentle, Insertion, Lesbians, Mouth Play, BBW, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 41244 Read Count: 365393
[Report This] Published: January 15 2014 Updated: July 20 2019
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 21 2016 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

OH MY GOD!!!! YOU'RE BACK!!!! YESSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!! Sorry, was excited. *cough* Great to have you back! Love this story, and I honestly thought it was dead. But I checked once a month for a long time just to make sure! Glad I did, because that cliffhanger in chapter 11 KILLED me! Anyways, fuck yes, you rock, can't wait to see what you have in store!

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: November 03 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

MOOOOOORE OMG I LUV U

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: December 13 2017 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Amazing chapter. Glad you have returned... but I wish I hadn't waited almost a year for an update lol. 

I'm glad Diane feels guilt, trying to commit murder!! And as for Haley.. I nearly cried when Linsey fell into comatose...

 

Yet again another cliffhanger... I hope I don't have to wait too long for the follow up ;) 

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 07 2018 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Awesome chapter. Didnt think you'd ever update this again.

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 12 2018 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Fantastic chapter. Super relieved that Linsey is ok, I was literally on the edge of my seat the past few chapters! Glad to know that Barbara can be undoubtedly trusted with the safety of the tiny women.

 

Cool to see two new figures added to the mix, Evie and Evelyn. I love how when Lilith choked and accidentally swallowed Evie, she was totally panicked yet Evie herself was having the time of her life LMAO. So funny and so hot. Wait till Evie finds out there's another passenger inside Lilith's gut...

 

All in all I'm excited for what comes next, and unfortunately I know how long it will be until it comes lol xD Solid work man.

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 26 2019 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Freaking awesome. Great development and I can't wait to see how this all plays out.

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: July 20 2019 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I like the nightmarish/thriller style writing with Holly grabbing Evie and walking around the shadows lol.

 

Nice to see an update, I hope all is well.

Summary:

A young woman is shrunken down and held captive by someone who has strange plans for her, involving her friend and a bowl of cereal. 


Categories: Giantess, Insertion, Scat, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: FF/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4147 Read Count: 32630
[Report This] Published: December 14 2014 Updated: December 14 2014
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 12 2021 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow, I wonder how many people have been unknowingly fed to Becca... Jill is a twisted human being lol incredible.


Would be neat to see a sequel where Becca finally catches Jill in the act of trying to feed someone to her, and Jill is forced to shrink Becca and eat her after. Love the concept!  

Summary:

A second-person POV tale where you're shrunken down by your sister's strange friend, who has equally strange plans for you. 


Categories: Scat, Giantess, Incest, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2348 Read Count: 24093
[Report This] Published: December 14 2014 Updated: December 14 2014
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Fed To Your Own Sister

Can't believe I never left a review on this perfect story. Atop my favorites in terms of vore! Great work I miss your writing!

Summary:

Two teenage best friends finally get to live out the fantasy of sledding down a mountain of ice cream; however, things don't go quite as planned. 


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Instant Size Change, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: M/m
Warnings: The Following story is appropriate for all audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4232 Read Count: 14373
[Report This] Published: November 28 2015 Updated: November 28 2015
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story is one of my favorite unaware vore stories on the site! The buildup was great and perfect and I loved how his little brother devoured them so mercilessy unaware! I hope to see more little sibling vore from you ^.^

Summary:

Two teens enjoy their yearly back yard campout until waking up tiny the morning after. 


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Crush, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: M/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5414 Read Count: 12735
[Report This] Published: December 11 2015 Updated: December 11 2015
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story was amazing! Very well done! I really hope you do more like this! Simply incredible!

Summary:

It was a normal day for you when your parents decided to go to London and all alone with a Maid, what could go wrong?


Categories: Vore, Butt, Crush, Feet, Legwear, Lesbians, Scat, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 878 Read Count: 15862
[Report This] Published: June 13 2016 Updated: June 13 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 13 2016 Title: Chapter 1: The shrink

First off, good unaware topic story idea. But you need to make paragraphs. You have no paragraphs and just a wall of text. It makes it very hard to read, and kind of an eye sore. As Eternal36 suggested you should work on your punctuation as well! I hope you don't get discouraged and keep on writing the story! Just improve readability and you should be good! I hope to see where this story goes :)

Summary:

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

 

 

Drake Dobson stumbles onto a strange object that his best friend has found. Unfortunately for Drake, the object was not so user friendly to him.


Categories: Adult 30-39, Giantess, Adventure, Butt, Couples, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Unaware, Teenager (13-19)
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 44 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 71285 Read Count: 554258
[Report This] Published: July 07 2016 Updated: December 30 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 29 2017 Title: Chapter 26: Problem Faces Solution

I love Jessica! I'm so glad she's not an evil cunt LOL



Author's Response:

Haha Nooo Jessica is based off someone I know in real life. She may get sexual desires of course, but never be Evil

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 29 2017 Title: Chapter 25: Planning Ahead

I'm happy to see Jennifer being remorseful over her selfish actions. But at the same time Kaylee is right not to trust her. I've actually grown to hate Rachel and Christina... tho their cruelty is hot af, on a moral level they are grotesque beings! Kaitlyn gets a free pass tho ;)



Author's Response:

Haha well Christine was always one I would consider the nicer of the two. The ONLY reason she treated Ricky the way she did was because she didn't want hers and Rachel's secret to get out.

I can't remember when, but I think I wrote Christine a bit more remorseful.

 

Or maybe that's what you're confusing Jennifer with?

It makes more sense to still dislike Rachel and Jennifer because that's the vibe I got from them lol.

Rachel and Jennifer were written to be more like, "like mother like daughter" type of relationship.