Reviewer: happiest_in_shadows Signed
Date: May 21 2014
Title: Chapter 1: Imprisonment
This has been a very fun read. The new world order tag had me a little worried as normally that means very bad things but in this case it seems the world was already in awful shape. I loved the confession with Melody and Cory and I have to say I'm quite glad that you made Melody very well developed physically. I like the thought that when a giantess says she'll take care of someone she actually tries to make sure she can. A strong lady seems better suited to give protection then a soft one to me.
Of course with so many things going right for Cory i can't help but worry something is going to go wrong. I'm hoping that's just paranoya on my part.
I was a bit surprised to learn that the fire planted within the omegas increased aggressive behavior. With the way they behaved towards the betas I was actually thinking these females must have extremely develop empathetic regions in their brain and very strong if not overwhelming maternal drives. It reminds me of an idea I'm having fun with in which a group of rather powerful beings actually enjoy a level of pleasure comparable to a narchotic whenever they're nurting a weaker being to the point that if they don't have someone to take care of they go into withdrawl.
Author's Response: Glad I shirked expectations a bit and that you've enjoyed the story so far! And yes, I wanted to have at least one of the girls be physically developed, and Melody seemed like the prime selection for that. Something about having easily the most gentle girl also being the most physically imposing felt right to me...as did having my, and I use this term loosely, "meanest" girl be the most unassuming.
No comment on Corey :3
Ah, actually, what the Fire is doing is....actually, I'll just copy and paste from a response I mad a long while back:
Think of what the Fire is doing as this: Normally, Claire does attain a sense of satisfaction from acting kindly toward and helping a Beta due to a combination of instinctual and learned behaviors, whether they be learned from her own experiences with Betas/from how she was raised/from the lessons given at the Institute. The evolved Fire perverts this, and establishes a link between those behaviors and delivering a punishment to an Alpha. What might have originally been an act that was carried out with some level of resignation becomes one carried out with a level of satisfaction, because it's "helping."
That idea actually sounds very neat, I'd love to see what you could do with it. I've always loved your stories, particularly Kate's, and honestly it's a bit flattering to see you enjoying my own tale. Thank you for commenting.