Mark shares his fantasy with his girlfriend, little does he know that his fantasy is about to become a reality.
this story is the one I reread the most. I like the slow build and the way the characters change as it develops. It has a real believability that I don't see too often.
I love the concept behind this one, and the sheer bad (or good depending on how you feel about it) luck that it was his girlfriend that bought him.
I love the way she talks like it's ridiculous to think she's about to swallow him, while simultaniously preparing to do it.
Great build up. You do an excellent slow buen.
A man broke up with a sweetheart recenetly, but left in her possession, a special ring. Not wanting to tell her just how special it was, he decides to steal it back, shrinking down and sneaking into her home. Things only go downhill from there.
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I love the fact that it is his pride that kills him. This is a great different look at unaware vore.
I'm glad to see that in the new version you fixed the continuity error (already ate dinner/ candle lit dinner). I've reread this story so many times. I hope you continue to write.
A miniature super-villain attempts to wreak vengeance on Wonder Woman. Will she even notice?
I kind of wish he hadn't survived and she never even noticed he was there, but understand that even by accident if Wonder Woman killed it would look bad in keeping with the image of the comics. It was a very good read.
Thanks. Truthfully, Wonder Woman has killed in the comics when there was no other option. But I don't think killing a defenseless two-inch tall man would sit well with her Amazonian code. Plus, I got pretty fond of the guy while writing this.
I greatly enjoyed this story. the "pov shots" were well done and the characters weren't cardboard cutouts, plus you offered several scenarios for great variety.
yeah, it's an old joke. He came back as winter soldier for a while. I haven't read the stuff where he's the new cap. I just threw that in because it struck me as funny.
I don't usually comment on stories before they are done, but you've reviewed mine before. I like where this is leading and look forward to reading the rest.
You must never judge a book by its cover,it may surprice you.
I particularly liked the rose bush trap and how calm the predator was.
Author's Response:
Yes i am a very calm person by nature,although i do have a dark side so be carefull.
Amanda.
You're a direct and to the point kind of writer. I'm going to have to keep my eye on this one.
Thanks, Oishi - it's been a while since I've added anything to this story due to work...but I'm going to some day!
You really explored the characters. For such a short story there was definite progression and development. I don't think making it longer is nescecarry. It was exactly the length it needed to be to tell the story. I probably would've omitted the line "She could tell that he wanted this too, as he slid toward her gullet." at this point in her development I'm not sure if she'd care what he wants. She feels she deserves this, but that might just be me.
A restaurant allows patrons to become a part of the menu.
I think the concept is great and am glad you've made multiple stories in the same setting.
Thank you Oishi1. I appreciate your review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Built on my story "Forbidden Dish," this story will include various guys and girls who enter the resteraunt that advertises live Vore of humans; " The Forbidden Dish." There is vore in every chapter.
Germany was a great choice. From what I understand there are more vorephiles there than any other country, but don't quote me on that. Nice build up. This story answered a few questions I had and was a fun read.
btw the fake shutter sound is made to deter perverts from taking upskirt pics.
Didn't know about the shutter sound. Interesting fact, although a little upseting. I guess that is why they call them perverts. Hmm. Interesting fact on Germany. Maybe I should book a trip there. Glad you liked the story. I hope to see more writing from you as well!
It would have to be a bit surreal to go through both sides of the process. I thought it was a very well done story.
Thank you very much :)
I think you chose the best possible ending. I was really hoping you'd go this route.
I enjoyed the setup in this chapter. I also liked the way you wrote Ivan's accent.
I enjoyed the fact that it was written as if it were an article in a magazine. Her change from nervous to full blown vorephile was great even if it was a little quick. This was a very fun story.
I enjoyed Lindsay's statement that she was supposed to tell Justin it was his last chance to back out, but since there was nothing he could do about it she wanted to eat him and that's that. I also really enjoyed the story following the character that changed his mind. Even when the character started out wanting to go I believe apprehension and last minute mind changing is more believable. I don't like the character to be too willing.
This brings us back to the subject of how any of us willing prey might actually react if we found ourselves in a situation where a predator is willing/ able to actually consume us. One would most likely have second thoughts and as a result I try to occasionally work that into stories.
Thanks for the review and the rating. Your feedback (no pun intended) is very gratifying as well as helpful for me when I write the next chapter. I hope you continue to enjoy this series.