Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed
Date: May 02 2014
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Entering The Safe Zone
In response to your response to my review, I was thinking that if women are that obsessed with men and that harrassment/rape occur often; maybe Mandy would come over just to see Dusty to make sure he is okay. She probably doesnt want to lose him to an other girl.
Besides, "you cant separate true love". Mandy's separation from Dusty might cause her to find him and get him.
Now that you brought up the far locations, maybe there could be an airplane scene where Mandy "accidently" takes Dusty with her, and the plane is filled with all women. Thats quite a scene!
I enjoy your setup so much! It really seems like a world full of women all for one man!
Author's Response:
I probably need to reread my chapter, but I meant to imply that Rape has gone -down- due to the enforced sperm donations. While there are still sex craved women out there, a lot more are satisfied to buy sperm to have children. It was a necessary step. Otherwise people would fight over who gets the baby-maker, not wanting their genes to die out.
Also, I like your idea for a plane ride. Honestly, I was leaning toward Dusty somehow getting mailed over there to them. That could be better though.
There's also the two-sided coin that while some women desire men, not just norms, there are others who hate them. I mean, if it's not against the law to murder them, why should they have any rights at all, and what's to stop someone from having a little fun?
Dangerous world out there for Shrinkees.