I awake to find myself shrunken in the house of my stepmother and her three daughters.
All Characters are fictional any similarities to real people are 100% coincidental.
Good story, but the chapters are too short. I suggest you make them longer with more detailed description of people, environment, perceptions, thoughts, and feelings. Also try to advance the story more with each chapter.
I'm working on it, kind of hit writers block though after firing out two full stories. :)
An attractive CIA agent has developed a new means of interrogating prisoners: Shrinking and humiliating them with her body.
Wonderful story!
Longer chapters would be great.
Looking forward to its continuation.
Yes, I agree with the two previous reviewers.
This is one great story! Lots of great descriptions! Lots of evil sexy scenarios!
Looking forward to the final chapter...
One great little story!
Author's Response:
Thanks SafetyPin! I do tend to write shorter stories compared to the rest of the great authors on this website.
The destruction of a civilization at the hands of a goddess. A sci-fi fantasy tale.
A captivating story...
Usually, macro stories are pretty superficial; not holding my interest for very long. But this one is a very good story - lots of interest with a promiss of giantess sex thrown in. I'm really looking forward to its continuation.
I'm glad you like it :)
When shrinking is finally possible, you volunteer to be your sisters toy for the holiday
Well written, Yougts.
One story - four years. I wish you could compose your stories a lttle faster.
Maybe... four stories in one year? Might make it easier for you to keep track of the story line.
A version of my other story 'A Shrinking Condition' where another author and I take a different direction by focusing on Steve's training going to the next level with his family.
Where the original is very lightly incestuous, this story focuses on sexualizing his step-mother and step-sister a lot, so you have been warned.
An excellent story!
I love the theme of a conflicted mother trying to protect her son, and yet finding herself giving in to uncontolled urges to go beyond what is neccessary. You two have done a great job in weaving the action elements between the retrospective emotions and thought process.
Appreciate it! We are both enjoying the chance to work with each other and we seem to have a very united vision for how we want this unrealistic situation to unravel as realistically as possible while trying to be as sexy as possible. We are having a lot of fun with it, lol.
I love where this one is going.
Please continue...
Oh we will, we're just on a little hiatus while we work on another project :D
Luke is in his early twenties yet he has not had a girlfriend. One day though something happens to reveal his real love, but is it?
Thanks, Defright.
Your story moves along slowly, but it's well done and quite believable (once you accept the shrinking process). When you give it some thought, most would realize that a shrunken person could not survive very long without protection and aid. He/she would either succumb to natural threats and hazards or would become sick from trying to eat scraps of rotting food or other indigestible plant-stuffs. Long-term survival would depend on someone or some group of people who would care for you. This what makes your story so believable.
Now make it more arousing by taking it toward sexual experimentation.
Good story.
However, I suggest that you clean up the spelling and grammar before you submit it as part of your college assignment.
A man learns the hard way that his date prefers smaller men in the bedroom.
Good start. Well written. Good potential.
I'll wait for the real action to begin before giving it a rating.
Gracias. I hope you find it meets that potential.
Would you do anything for your family? Anything?
Thanks for this brief update.
All-round, it's a good story. I'm very much enjoying it.
Please remember, by convention, the personal pronoun "I" is always capitaized - even when contracted with a verb. It should be: "I've", not "i've"; "I'm", not "i'm"; and "I'll, not "i'll".
Thanks for a nice review SafetyPin! It's nice to see you're enjoying this story of mine.
Also, about the I's, I know that they're supposed to always be capitalized, it just evades me when writing up a chapter. But I'll stay on the lookout from now on!
What's a "time-out"?
I know what it is in the context of a sporting match, but the way you use it in this story, it sounds like it is intended to be some kind of punishment for Andrew.
Mwahaha, you'll have to learn SafetyPin >=D
At least you're taking an interest in this story, I hope you continue to review!
Sammy throws a party for her best friend while inviting a bunch of her enemies. What was she thinking?
Good start. Please continue.
Note: spellcheck doesn't work for everything: "excuse", "there", "shock".
Thank you again for finding my mistakes. I don't know how I keep missing them but thank you for picking them up.
It a story about a guy fallling in love with his old best friend
I would’ve read this earlier, but my wife was down... : )
Good story. Please continue...
Thank You So Much
Good story.
Just stop apologizing and provide a brief description of each chapter.
A man is in for the strangest day of his life.
I like this theme. However, this particular story is too short for my tastes.
Even the contents are not original.
What was supposed to be the greatest night of his life takes a turn for the worse. It starts with some heavy ass material, but will include but not limit to: Foot, Boobs, Oral, Panty Entrapment, Face and Stomach Material. (Unaware Body Exploration Story)
Great story.
Disappointing, short chapter.
you say it's short I say it's not. you shouldnt write a review based on a word count.
I never see you write any story before yet you have the nerve to tell people to write more for your own pleasure so you can read more fiction. most authors put their heart and soul into their writing and dont need you putting them down.
it's not always about how many words are in a story but what they say. Asukafan created a minimum of 500 words per chapter and if it's okay by him then you shouldnt worry about it.
I didnt see you reviewing the last chapter and that was 3 times as long. Please do not review my story anymore based on how many words are in a chapter. you throwing low ratings isnt going to motivate me to write more words it's going to wonder why i post when theres people like you throwing low ratings because they dont like the word count when it doesnt matter. Again, it's not always about how many words are in a story but what they say.
if someone had revied my last longest chapter maybe i would be inspired to write another one like it but since i got nothing from that chapter i didnt think it mattered and it shouldnt because again it's not always about how many words are in a story but what they say.
Very good start, Mr. E.
I'm looking forward to its continuation.
Note the following correction:
"I wanted to plant a kiss on those opulent, pink lips, but thought it would be better to wait until she closed her mouth and started breathing through her nose. Then I could sneak out from underneath her bottom lip..."
Thanks very much for the grammar correction. I've actually been rereading the whole time since i've posted it adding a few words and correctin spelling and grammar mistakes but that one would have slipped right by me.
The conclusion is going to be EPIC but before that is a lot of voyuerism and almost every part of her body will be explored
A boyfriend willing to do anything to please his girlfriend gets the shock of his life but will he regret his devotion to her.
This story is quite good.
Could get even more twisted...
